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The pie charts represent the average Australian energy usage by various appliances in the Australian household and greenhouse emissions from these appliances.
Overall it is clear from the charts that heating devices consume most of the energy and the water heating system is responsible for the most greenhouse emissions in the Australian atmosphere.
Heating appliances consume the most energy in the Australian household, accounting for about 42% and water heating is the second highest contributing to around 30%, while, other appliances use only 15% of the total energy in Australia. Refrigeration, lighting and cooling devices are the least among all only 7%, 4% and 2% respectively.
Regarding greenhouse emissions, water heating emits around 32%, the highest among all, followed by the other appliances which is 28%. Refrigeration is responsible for around 14% of the total greenhouse emissions in Australia, while, heating, cooling and lighting devices are nearly a quarter, all together.
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Overall Band Score: 7.5
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8
Key features are identified and comparisons are made accurately, though more detail could further support the description.
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7
The vocabulary used is relevant and varied, though some repetition is present.
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7.5
The response is logically organized with clear paragraphing, but could benefit from smoother transitions between sentences.
Grammatical Range
7
Good grammatical range with mostly accurate sentence structures, though lacking complex sentences.
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