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The first car appeared on British road in 1988. By the year 2000 there maybe as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The first car appeared on British road in 1988. By the year 2000 there maybe as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 1
Since the first invention of the car, the numbers have grown exponentially in the most parts of the world. It is generally argued that alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and there should be control on car ownership and use through the legalisation of laws. I strongly believe in this idea, though some people disagree. This essay will discuss why it is necessary to promote an alternative to reduce vehicles on roads. While, those who support an increased number of car ownership, argue that alternative forms of transport are not reliable. They mean to say, the public transit lacks quality of service and that these tend to be mostly delayed or break down halfway due to lack of maintenance and so on. Ultimately, people are late to work and frustration rises and, thus the effects are seen in the reduced efficiency and productivity of the people. In short, it is not a good idea to encourage use of alternative transport options. However, there remain strong reasons in favour of encouraging alternative forms of the transportation services and putting international laws to control car ownership and usage. First and foremost, doing so will help to reduce the number of small vehicles; eventually reducing fuel consumption and co2 emission. To exemplify, a report published in The Hindu Times of India, said that, the introduction of a metro railway system in Bangalore has cut down 40% of cars on roads leading to the reduction in air pollution. Another reason is to save the resources used for building cars. Many organisations voicing for the environment have shown facts, that clarifies human are over exploiting natural resources, and we have reached a point of running out of them. Therefore, it is critical to introduce laws to control the mass production and use of vehicles in order to save resources for future generation. In conclusion, though it is true that often times public transits are not reliable, I strongly agree to encourage the use of other forms of transport and introduce the international laws to limit the car ownership and uses, for it is an essential step towards preserving the environment.
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first
invention of the
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car
, the numbers have grown
exponentially
in the most parts of the world. It is
generally
argued that
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alternative
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forms
of
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transport
should
be encouraged
and there should be control on
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car
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ownership
and
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use
through the
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legalisation
of
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laws
. I
strongly
believe in this
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idea
, though
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some
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people
disagree. This essay will discuss why it is necessary to promote an
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alternative
to
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reduce
vehicles on roads.

While, those who support an increased number of
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car
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ownership
, argue that
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alternative
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forms
of
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transport
are not reliable. They mean to say, the public transit lacks quality of service and that these tend to be
mostly
delayed or break down halfway due to lack of maintenance and
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so
on.
Ultimately
,
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people
are late to work and frustration rises and,
thus
the effects are
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seen
in the
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reduced
efficiency and productivity of the
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people
. In short, it is not a
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good
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idea
to encourage
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use
of
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alternative
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transport
options.

However
, there remain strong reasons in
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favour
of encouraging
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alternative
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forms
of the transportation services and putting international
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laws
to control
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car
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ownership
and usage.
First
and foremost, doing
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so
will
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help
to
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reduce
the number of
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small
vehicles;
eventually
reducing fuel consumption and co2 emission. To exemplify, a report published in The Hindu Times of India, said that, the introduction of a metro railway system in Bangalore has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down 40% of
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cars
on roads leading to the reduction in air pollution. Another reason is to save the resources
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used
for building
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cars
.
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Many
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organisations
voicing for the environment have shown facts, that clarifies human are over exploiting natural resources, and we have reached a point of running out of them.
Therefore
, it is critical to introduce
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laws
to control the mass production and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of vehicles in order to save resources for future generation.

In conclusion
, though it is true that
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often
times public transits are not reliable, I
strongly
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agree
to encourage the
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use
of other
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forms
of
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transport
and introduce the international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
to limit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
and
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uses
, for it is an essential step towards preserving the environment.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British road in 1988. By the year 2000 there maybe as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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