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The extinction of species and biodiversity due to human activities.

The extinction of species and biodiversity due to human activities. 0MxEG
Despite knowing about the significance of biodiversity for a long period of time, human activities have caused massive extinctions of diverse species. Deforestation and waste in nature are the major problems to extinction of species and biodiversity. This essay is going to examine the major problem of a loss of biodiversity and feasible solutions to this matter. The extinction of diverse species causes a loss of ecological balance which is significant for food chains. Food chain needs to be balanced because organisms in the food chain are connecting together. If there is one species in the food chain becoming extinct, other species in the food chain will get a domino effect. The number of higher organisms in the food chain resulted in decrease because they have no food while the lower organisms are increasing because of a lack of predators. The main solution for extinction of diverse species depends on individuals. Nowadays, the majority of individuals have called out to protect the environment including campaigns for humans to help reduce the use of plastic. Furthermore, various campaigns provide the knowledge to correctly exterminate waste and reuse the plastic. The campaigns provide knowledge for individuals who are frequently negligent exterminating the waste by littering waste into the ocean. From the statistics, there are 5. 25 trillion pieces of plastic waste estimated to be in the oceans. Waste in the ocean is an adulterated thing for marine life. Some marine life have consumed the plastic which caused dyspnea and amount of residue in their body. The government is one of the institutions that have been empowered to enact regulations which are eco-friendly. Some groups of humans break the rule and destroy the preserved forest; therefore, the government needs to create a stronger role to protect the preserved forest. In statistics, there is deforestation around ten million hectares every year. For instance, dodo is a species of bird which became extinct due to human activities. In 1638, Dutch colonists tried to farm and cut down the trees in Madagascar where dodo were living and they hunted the dodo and consumed them. After that dodo was extinct. Furthermore, sorted waste things are one of the laws that the government can create. Sorted waste and reused stuff such as paper can increase the number of deforestation in the world. Australia is one of the countries that have a high amount of rescued paper and to be capable. People need to organize waste such as paper before rejecting them, then the government agency will put it into the process to reused paper. Based on the discussion, I personally believe that the major problem of extinction of biodiversity is unbalanced ecological. The world’s ecosystem has been negatively affected by human activities. On the other hand, the solution can be established by humans too.
Despite knowing about the significance of biodiversity for a long period of time,
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human
activities have caused massive
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extinctions
of diverse species. Deforestation and
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waste
in nature are the major problems to
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extinction
of species and biodiversity. This essay is going to examine the major problem of a loss of biodiversity and feasible solutions to this matter.

The
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extinction
of diverse species causes a loss of ecological balance which is significant for
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food
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chains
.
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Food
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chain
needs to
be balanced
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because
organisms in the
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food
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chain
are connecting together. If there is one species in the
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food
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chain
becoming extinct, other species in the
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food
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chain
will
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get
a domino effect. The number of higher organisms in the
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food
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chain
resulted in decrease
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because
they have no
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food
while the lower organisms are increasing
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because
of a lack of predators.

The main solution for
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extinction
of diverse species depends on individuals. Nowadays, the majority of individuals have called out to protect the environment including campaigns for
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humans
to
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help
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reduce
the
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use
of
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plastic
.
Furthermore
, various campaigns provide the knowledge to
correctly
exterminate
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waste
and reuse the
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plastic
. The campaigns provide knowledge for individuals who are
frequently
negligent exterminating the
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waste
by littering
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waste
into the ocean. From the statistics, there are 5. 25 trillion pieces of
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plastic
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waste
estimated to be in the oceans.
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Waste
in the ocean is an adulterated thing for marine life.
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Some
marine life have consumed the
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plastic
which caused dyspnea and amount of residue in their body.

The
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government
is one of the institutions that have
been empowered
to enact regulations which are eco-friendly.
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Some
groups of
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humans
break the
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rule
and
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destroy
the preserved forest;
therefore
, the
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government
needs to create a stronger role to protect the preserved forest. In statistics, there is deforestation around ten million hectares every year.
For instance
, dodo is a species of bird which became extinct due to
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human
activities. In 1638, Dutch colonists tried to farm and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down the trees in Madagascar where dodo were
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living and
they hunted the dodo and consumed them. After that dodo was extinct.
Furthermore
, sorted
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waste
things are one of the laws that the
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government
can create. Sorted
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waste
and reused stuff such as paper can increase the number of deforestation in the world. Australia is one of the countries that have a high amount of rescued paper and to be capable.
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People
need to organize
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waste
such as paper
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before
rejecting them, then the
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government
agency will put it into the process to reused paper.

Based on the discussion, I
personally
believe that the major problem of
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extinction
of biodiversity
is unbalanced
ecological. The world’s ecosystem has been
negatively
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affected
by
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human
activities.
On the other hand
, the solution can
be established
by
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humans
too.
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IELTS essay The extinction of species and biodiversity due to human activities.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
466 words
6.0
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