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The exploration and development of safe alternatives of fossil fuels should be the most important global priority. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers. v.1

The exploration and development of safe alternatives of fossil fuels should be the most important global priority. v. 1
Fossil fuels will play a vital role in today's society as a major source of power. Every country needs energy to boost its economy and fulfil the basic requirements of its citizens. Unfortunately, these sources are non-renewable resources, which will use up in the near future. This situation has created emergence to find new alternative methods to mitigate the rising demand for power. To commence with, petrol, diesel and other fuels are obtained from the refining of crude oil, which is produced after many centuries. These days, technology has helped to develop more efficient equipment, however, there are some limitations which cannot be ignored like air pollution and noise pollution as major issues. Moreover, an acceleration in the use of private vehicles also produce more and more greenhouse gases and highly effects on global warming. On the contrary, there are such methods and techniques can become an alternate option for this situation. First and foremost method is to encourage people to use a plethora of public transportation services by the governments. As a consequence, it reduces the burden of excess requirements of fuel, in addition, by means of fewer cars and bikes on the road will direct deduction of fumes and gases from burning of the fuel. Furthermore, such alternative energy sources can be employed by not only the individuals, but also by the government sectors as well as private. In India, many states have introduced electronic buses to commute from one city to another for dwellers. Similarly, wave, geothermal, wind, hydropower and solar energy are optimal solutions and eco-friendly. These are considered as infinite source as compared to fossil fuels. To encapsulate this essay, petrol, diesel, kerosene is the basic needs of everyday life and its availability is limited, whereas renewable energy sources are enough compatible to fulfil daily demands with unlimited access and environment-friendly. Thus, it is beneficial to emphasize them at a global level.
Fossil
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fuels
will play a vital role in
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today
's society as a major
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
of power. Every country needs
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
to boost its economy and fulfil the basic requirements of its citizens. Unfortunately, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
are non-renewable resources, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
up in the near future. This situation has created emergence to find new alternative methods to mitigate the rising demand for power.

To commence with, petrol, diesel and other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
are obtained
from the refining of crude oil, which
is produced
after
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
centuries. These days, technology has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
to develop more efficient equipment,
however
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
limitations which cannot be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
like air pollution and noise pollution as major issues.
Moreover
, an acceleration in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of private vehicles
also
produce more and more greenhouse gases and
highly
effects on global warming.
On the contrary
, there are such methods and techniques can become an alternate option for this situation.

First
and foremost method is to encourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
a plethora of public transportation services by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
. As a consequence, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the burden of excess requirements of
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fuel
,
in addition
, by means of fewer cars and bikes on the road will direct deduction of fumes and gases from burning of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
.
Furthermore
, such alternative
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energy
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sources
can
be employed
by not
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only
the individuals,
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but
also
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
sectors
as well
as private. In India,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
states have introduced electronic buses to commute from one city to another for dwellers.
Similarly
, wave, geothermal, wind, hydropower and solar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
are optimal solutions and eco-friendly. These
are considered
as infinite
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source
as compared to fossil fuels.

To encapsulate this essay, petrol, diesel, kerosene is the basic needs of everyday life and its availability
is limited
, whereas renewable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
compatible to fulfil daily demands with unlimited access and environment-friendly.
Thus
, it is beneficial to emphasize them at a global level.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay The exploration and development of safe alternatives of fossil fuels should be the most important global priority. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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