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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. The what extent so you agreed or disagree? v.2

The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. The what extent so you agreed or disagree? v. 2
Presently, people living in several parts of the world are facing a huge problem because of the environmental issues. Though the public had started awareness camps around the globe, there was no impact on several industries. So, the law enforcement authorities should impose restrictions on the industries that manufacture automobiles and numerous mechanical items. In this essay, I agree that government and other industries should try to reduce the damage caused to the environment. Interestingly, the majority of the people living in the developed nations like the United States and other countries are creating social awareness and writing requests to the bureaucrats. Besides, the higher authorities were trying to solve this issue, while they had also started supporting environmental friendly projects. A research stated that 90% of the carbon content in the United States had reduced after imposing several restrictions on the automobile industries. On the other hand, the globally reputed companies like Google and Apple started attracting customers by supporting the global warming. Moreover, even a lot of startup companies were willing to carry their research in the solar power. Tesla, which manufactures electric cars, had contributed a lot reduce carbon emissions. For instance, even though their motive is to achieve profits, they were trying to decrease the negative effects. In this essay, While people had tried to solve this problem, they may inspire very few people and the impact would be too small. Therefore, the government and multi-national companies had made the work too simple, while they helped to decrease pollution very quickly. I think that to survive in a pollution free surroundings everyone should help to decrease the damage.
Presently
,
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people
living in several parts of the world are facing a huge problem
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because
of the environmental issues. Though the public had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
awareness camps around the globe, there was no impact on several industries.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, the law enforcement authorities should impose restrictions on the industries that manufacture automobiles and numerous mechanical items. In this essay, I
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agree
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and other industries should try to
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reduce
the damage caused to the environment.

Interestingly
, the majority of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
living in the developed nations like the United States and other countries are creating social awareness and writing requests to the bureaucrats.
Besides
, the higher authorities were trying to solve this issue, while they had
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
supporting environmental friendly projects.
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "research".
A research
stated that 90% of the carbon content in the United States had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
after imposing several restrictions on the automobile industries.

On the other hand
, the globally reputed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
like Google and Apple
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
attracting customers by supporting the global warming.
Moreover
, even
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a lot of
startup
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
were willing to carry their research in the solar power. Tesla, which manufactures electric cars, had contributed a lot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
carbon emissions.
For instance
,
even though
their motive is to achieve profits, they were trying to decrease the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects.

In this essay, While
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people
had tried to solve this problem, they may inspire
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very
few
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people
and the impact would be too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
.
Therefore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and multi-national
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
had made the work too simple, while they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
to decrease pollution
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
quickly
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that to survive in a pollution free surroundings everyone should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to decrease the damage.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. The what extent so you agreed or disagree? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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