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The environment problem that today's world is facing are so great that there is a Little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. v.1

The environment problem that today's world is facing are so great that there is a Little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. v. 1
Environment gives supplemental benefits to people because trees give some kind of resources which is used in day to day life Benefits. Some benefits as protection of health and it works as a medicine. The climate is changing nature and providing natural and fresh breeze. Splendid wind is important for human because they take a natural breeze and natural breath gives good health benefits. Some people are taking some responsibility for forest yard because some people are cutting more trees without permission. Trees take carbon dioxide and gives oxygen to us. Some people are saying message through rallies and gives us message to people for what are the benefits if we save trees. For example, as forest officer and it is my duty to save trees. Only few people are serious about environmental issues. Some people are living in forest area and they give some marvellous service to others through take some responsibility. Generally people are cutting more trees for selling and earn some money. There are many people facing environmental problems as breathing, pollution, some disease. Not good situation, we want to face my difficulties and problems. Some people are wasting water. Some government took already action to damage the temperature and if any person is the damaging humidity he should pay ample amount of the fine. For example, I am damaging some trees for my own purposes and some officer arrested because as per the law. I conclude that the temperature gives benefits to us we used it in a better manner because good surroundings gives healthy and fit for the people.
Environment
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supplemental
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to
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people
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because
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trees
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give
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some
kind of resources which is
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used
in day to day life
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Benefits
.
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Some
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benefits
as protection of health and it works as a medicine.

The climate is changing nature and providing natural and fresh breeze. Splendid wind is
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important
for human
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because
they take a natural breeze and natural breath
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gives
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good
health
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benefits
.
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Some
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people
are taking
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some
responsibility for forest yard
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because
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some
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people
are cutting more
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trees
without permission.
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Trees
take carbon dioxide and
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gives
oxygen to us.
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Some
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people
are saying message through rallies and
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us message to
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people
for what are the
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benefits
if we save
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trees
.
For example
, as forest officer and it is my duty to save
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trees
.
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Only
few
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people
are serious about environmental issues.

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Some
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people
are living in forest
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area and
they
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give
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some
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marvellous
service to others through take
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some
responsibility.
Generally
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people
are cutting more
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trees
for selling and earn
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some
money. There are
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many
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people
facing environmental problems as breathing, pollution,
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some
disease. Not
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good
situation, we want to face my difficulties and problems.
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Some
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people
are wasting water.
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Some
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government
took already action to damage the temperature and if any person is the damaging humidity he should pay ample amount of the fine.
For example
, I am damaging
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some
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trees
for my
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own
purposes and
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some
officer arrested
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because
as per the law.

I conclude that the temperature
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gives
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benefits
to us we
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used
it in a better manner
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because
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good
surroundings
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gives
healthy and fit for the
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people
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The environment problem that today's world is facing are so great that there is a Little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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