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The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Rom v.2

The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Rom v. 2
The textbook text describes Claudius as one of the most successful Roman emperor. His empire was spread between 3 continents between 41 to 54 CE. He was supposed to be the most innovative fair and wise in all Roman history. He helped build the ports for rome and aqueducts that brought fresh water to homes. He was praised to have slaves or former slaves for at high bureaucratic position. He aslo entrusted his wives and gave them political opportunities. The professor admits that he did few good deeds in his reign but he agrees with the detractors of claudius that he was weak as a leader. He started describing his argument by pointing out the way Claudius became the ruler, by assasinating the emperor and by paying off the army. He almost took Rome to a civil war. He did work for the rights of slave but he had bad judgement. He use to judge before listening to his both sides. He concoured britain to win its prestige but destroyed its indegenious people. Slaves that he kept on the higher bureaucratic positions were notorious and subject to bribe. His wives were killers and often poisioned people to find their way. As fate came around and his last wife killed him by using poisioning mushroom to make her son Nero as the emperor. Nero later came to be known as one of the worst ruler of Rome, which questions the judgement of Claudius making Nero as his successor of the throne. Claudius might have been a good man by freeing slaves and developing the country but he was a fool that lead his pride and foolishness get to him.
The textbook text
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describes
Claudius as one of the most successful Roman emperor. His empire
was spread
between 3 continents
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 41 and 54".
between 41 to 54
CE. He
was supposed
to be the most innovative
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fair
and wise in all Roman history. He
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helped
build the ports for
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rome
and aqueducts that brought fresh water to homes.
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He
was praised
to have
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slaves
or former
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slaves
for at high bureaucratic position.
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He
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aslo
entrusted his wives and gave them political opportunities.

The professor admits that he did few
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good
deeds in his reign
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but
he
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agrees
with the detractors of
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claudius
that he was weak as a leader. He
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started
describing his argument by pointing out the way Claudius became the ruler, by
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assasinating
the emperor and by paying off the army. He almost took Rome to a civil war.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
He
did work for the rights of
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slave
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but
he had
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bad
judgement.
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He
Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".
use to
judge
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before
listening to his both sides.
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He
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concoured
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britain
to win its prestige
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but
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destroyed
its
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indegenious
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people
.

Slaves that he
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kept
on the higher bureaucratic positions were notorious and subject to bribe. His wives were killers and
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often
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poisioned
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people
to find their way. As fate came around and his last wife killed him by using
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poisioning
mushroom to
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make
her son Nero as the emperor. Nero later came to
be known
as one of the worst ruler of Rome, which questions the judgement of Claudius making Nero as his successor of the throne.

Claudius might have been a
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good
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man
by freeing
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slaves
and developing the country
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but
he was a fool that lead his pride and foolishness
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get
to him.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

IELTS essay The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Rom v. 2

Essay
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4 paragraphs
278 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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