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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
The procedure of using geothermal energy to produce electricity was illustrated by the diagram. Overall, it is a method that transfers cold water to the electricity by using the heat of geothermal and a generator. First of all, the transformation of the form of water was shown in the diagram. First, the cold water pumped down through a tube of 4. 5 km and then enter the injection well. then, it will be passed through the geothermal zone which was underground and made by many hot rocks. Finally, the water will become hot and enter the production well to pump up to the condenser which set on the ground. After that, the hot water will arrive at the condenser and transfer to the stream. Meanwhile, those stream from the condenser will provide power to the turbine and make it run so as to turn on the generator that will produce electricity.
The procedure of using geothermal energy to produce electricity
was illustrated
by the diagram.

Overall
, it is a method that transfers
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cold
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water
to the electricity by using the heat of geothermal and a generator.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the transformation of the form of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
was shown
in the diagram.
First
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
pumped down through a tube of 4. 5 km and then enter the injection well.
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then
, it will
be passed
through the geothermal zone which was underground and made by
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many
hot rocks.
Finally
, the
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water
will become hot and enter the production well to pump up to the condenser which set on the ground.

After that, the hot
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water
will arrive at the condenser and transfer to the stream. Meanwhile, those stream from the condenser will provide power to the turbine and
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make
it run
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
turn on the generator that will produce electricity.
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IELTS essay The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

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151 words
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