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‘The Devoted Friend’ is a story of one-sided friendship.

‘The Devoted Friend’ is a story of one-sided friendship. Jwq6k
Little Hans was a simple, innocent, kind-hearted and sincere fellow. He was a hard working gardener and earned his living by selling the fruits and flowers into the market of the town. Hugh the miller was a rich but clever and selfish man. He always claimed that he was a devoted friend of little Hans. In the summer season, the miller would go to the garden of Hans and bring plenty of flowers and fruit without making him any payment. He never gave anything to Hans. Hugh the miller repeatedly exploited Hans. Sometimes, he sent Hans to Market with a heavy sack of flour. Sometimes, he asked Hans to drive his flock of sheep to the mountains for grazing. He would also ask Hans to work on his flourmill or do some work of repair in his barn. In return, he merely made a promise to give his invalid and damaged wheelbarrow to Hans, free of cost. The miller called it an act of great generosity. Unfortunately, the promise was never materialized. It is so happened that on a rough and stormy night, Hugh the miller sent little Hans to bring the doctor because the miller’s little son hand been seriously injured. As usual, little Hans showed compliance and left for the doctor’s home as he could never think of displeasing the miller. When poor Hans was returning with the doctor, the storm grew more fierce and he lost his way in the dangerous rocky region. He stranded on the moor and fell into a deep pool of water, where he was drowned. In this way, the innocent fellow lost his life for the sake miller
Little
Hans was a simple, innocent, kind-hearted and sincere fellow. He was a
hard working
gardener and earned his living by selling the fruits and flowers into the market of the town. Hugh the miller was a rich
but
clever and selfish
man
. He always claimed that he was a devoted friend of
little
Hans.

In
the summer season
, the miller would go to the garden of Hans and bring
plenty
of flowers and fruit without making him any payment. He never gave anything to Hans. Hugh the miller
repeatedly
exploited Hans.
Sometimes
, he
sent
Hans to Market with a heavy sack of flour.
Sometimes
, he asked Hans to drive his flock of sheep to the mountains for grazing. He would
also
ask Hans to work on his
flourmill
or do
some
work of repair in his barn.

In return, he
merely
made a promise to give his invalid and damaged wheelbarrow to Hans, free of cost. The miller called it an act of great generosity. Unfortunately, the promise was never materialized.

It is
so
happened that on a rough and stormy night, Hugh the miller
sent
little
Hans to bring the doctor
because
the miller’s
little
son hand been
seriously
injured. As usual,
little
Hans
showed
compliance and
left
for the doctor’s home as he could never
think
of displeasing the miller. When poor Hans was returning with the doctor, the storm grew more
fierce and
he lost his way in the
dangerous
rocky region. He stranded on the moor and fell into a deep pool of water, where he
was drowned
. In this way, the innocent fellow lost his life for the sake
miller
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IELTS essay ‘The Devoted Friend’ is a story of one-sided friendship.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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