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The dangers of smoking are well known yet many people countinue witht this habbit . Problem and causes

The dangers of smoking are well known yet many people countinue witht this habbit. Problem and causes Mw8Ba
In modern world smoking is a major concern between numerous people while saveral individuals still smoke because of their habits. I will discuss problems caused by this and suggest solutions to tackle these problems To commence with, the most prominent drawback of smoking is respiratory problems. Smoking is the main reason of lung cancer in most people because the toxic substance people consume while smoking directly affect their lungs and it will create many breathing difficulties and it is sometimes fatal. For example, a survey conducted by world health organisation showed that heavy smokers suffer more with lung cancer as compare to non smokers. Furthermore, smoking cause addiction among smokers which effect their boady very badly if they do not smoke than their boady will not work properly and they feel low because it become habit for them. However, there are various solutions which will help in solving the problem of smoking among plethora of people. One significant solution is implementation of strict laws by government such as restricting smoking on public places and in work places which will help people in fighting with the urge of smoking. Additionally another solution is providing non harmful subsitutes such as electronic flavored smoking devices which do not have any side effects on health of individuals. In conclusion, it is clear that smoking is becoming a major complication in todays world in large number of individuals and it is need of time for government as well as people to take steps towards this problems solution.
In modern world
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smoking
is a major concern between numerous
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people
while
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saveral
individuals
still
smoke
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because
of their habits. I will discuss
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problems
caused by this and suggest
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solutions
to tackle these
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problems
To commence with, the most prominent drawback of
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smoking
is respiratory
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problems
.
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Smoking
is the main reason of lung cancer in most
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people
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because
the toxic substance
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people
consume while
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smoking
directly
affect their lungs and it will create
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many
breathing difficulties and it is
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sometimes
fatal.
For example
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organisation
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showed
that heavy smokers suffer more with lung cancer as compare to
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non smokers
.
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,
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smoking
cause addiction among smokers which effect their
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boady
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very
badly
if they do not smoke than their
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will not work
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properly and
they feel low
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because
it
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, there are various
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solutions
which will
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help
in solving the
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problem
of
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smoking
among plethora of
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people
. One significant
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solution
is implementation of strict laws by
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government
such as restricting
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smoking
on public places and in work places which will
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help
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people
in fighting with the urge of
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smoking
.
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Additionally
another
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solution
is providing
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non harmful
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subsitutes
such as electronic flavored
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smoking
devices which do not have any side effects on health of individuals.
In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that
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smoking
is becoming a major complication in
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todays
world in large number of individuals and it
is need
of time for
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government
as well
as
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people
to take steps towards this
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problems
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solution
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IELTS essay The dangers of smoking are well known yet many people countinue witht this habbit. Problem and causes

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  American English
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252 words
5.5
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