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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? jW5L
Smoking is bad for health, but still many people stick to this habit. In the beginning, it gives you pleasure but after some time people are addicted to cigarettes. In this essay, we will discuss about it causes and How can we turn down this habit? Cigarettes contain Nicotine, that is a type of a highly addictive chemical. When a person inhales the smoke from a cigarette, Dopomine a pleasant giving chemical is released in brain and as a result person enjoys a pleasurable feeling. Secondly, If the person continuous to smoke on daily basis it can cause him serious health issues like lung cancer and asthma and will affect the people who are living with him. A popular study done a by a research company shows that children who are living in homes with secondhand smoke are likely to have respiratory infections. Leaving a smoking habit will not be easy. Firstly, the individual will required willpower and motivation to quit the habit. In my view he should involved him in different activities like yoga and doing physical exercises or he can develop a hobby in which he can keep himself busy to avoid smoking. Furthermore, he can opt for some therapies or use an alternative for cigarettes. For instance, he can go for a nicotine replacement therapy in which he will be provided with chewing gums and he can use them whenever he feels to smoke or either person can switch to E-cigarettes from the consultation of a doctor which does not contain nicotine but it wapes will give him a feeling like he is smoking a cigarette. In conclusion, it depends on person to person whether he wants a healthy lifestyle or a low lifestyle everything has its own consequences. I think a person should not develop a bad habit if that is developing then he should be controlled
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stick to this
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. In the beginning, it gives you pleasure
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after
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to cigarettes. In this essay, we will
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causes and How can we turn down this habit?

Cigarettes contain Nicotine,
that is
a
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type of a
highly
addictive chemical. When a
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person
inhales the
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smoke
from a cigarette,
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Dopomine
a pleasant giving chemical
is released
in brain and
as a result
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person
enjoys a pleasurable feeling.
Secondly
, If the
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person
continuous to
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smoke
on daily basis it can cause him serious health issues like lung cancer and asthma and will affect the
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people
who are living with him. A popular study done a by a research
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company
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shows
that children who are living in homes with secondhand
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smoke
are likely to have respiratory infections.

Leaving a
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smoking
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habit
will not be easy.
Firstly
, the individual will required willpower and motivation to quit the
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habit
. In my view he should
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involved
him in
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different
activities like yoga and doing physical
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exercises or
he can develop a hobby in which he can
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keep
himself busy to avoid
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smoking
.
Furthermore
, he can opt for
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some
therapies or
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use
an alternative for cigarettes.
For instance
, he can go for a nicotine replacement therapy in which he will
be provided
with chewing
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gums and
he can
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use
them whenever he feels to
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smoke
or either
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person
can switch to E-cigarettes from the consultation of a doctor which does not contain nicotine
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but
it
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wapes
will give him a feeling like he is
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smoking
a cigarette.

In conclusion
, it depends on
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person
to
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person
whether he wants a healthy lifestyle or a low lifestyle everything has its
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own
consequences. I
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think
a
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person
should not develop a
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bad
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habit
if
that is
developing then he should be
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controlled
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IELTS essay The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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