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For all children the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write How far do you agree with this suggestion How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument in your view

For all children the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write How far do you agree with this suggestion How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument in your view gVG7
The question of which skills for a child’s education is important for all parents and educators. A proportion of people, furthermore, believe that music can certainly play a crucial role as important as literacy, I hold the view that these abilities are not possible for all children, and I will explain my compelling reasons in the following paragraphs. To begin with, the most rational justification is; playing a musical instrument is not possible for all children. Correspondingly, an uncountable number of children may have not a substantial physical movement; A good illustration for this is; children who have limited movement. complementary to this, the more children have this kind of problem, the more lose their opportunities revolving around playing a musical instrument. Notwithstanding such criticism, some children overcome this aspect. It seems simplistic to say that music is not only for all children but also for all people. Nonetheless, it would not be far-fetched to hold the view that not all children toss enough talent. In fact, let us take the example of children who started to play music, though they are stopped after a while. Of course, people who say that children by perfectly adequate must be allowed to develop their talents are quite correct; it is equally true, while only a few children may actually have musical, playing a musical instrument may not be feasible for all children. It has been shown that playing a musical instrument should be necessary for all children, while my glowing tribute is: in no way do I agree with that for all children.
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as literacy, I hold the view that these abilities are not possible for all
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, and I will
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my compelling reasons in the following paragraphs.

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with, the most rational justification is;
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is not possible for all
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.
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. Notwithstanding such criticism,
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overcome this aspect.

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,
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may not be feasible for all children.

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should be necessary for all
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IELTS essay For all children the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write How far do you agree with this suggestion How important is it for a child to learn to play a musical instrument in your view

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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