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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. v. 1
It is considered that the crime rate these days is getting decreases compared to the past, owing to the advance technology, through which crime can be prevented and resolved. I agree with this statement and this essay will discuss reasons for it. Crime rate nowadays is comparatively lower than in the past, due to the technology inventions such as CCTV cameras. In almost all sensitive areas and crowdy places such as hospitals, universities, and shopping malls in big cities, there are surveillance cameras installed, which gives the recordings of the area and each moment activity can be monitored. This, in turn, means criminals would not opt for any offensive move, owing to the installed cameras, and if they do any criminal act, it can be easily traced. This means the suspect can be find out through the recording saved in the cameras. However, this was not the case in the past, as there were no surveillance system at that time. A recent report by the International Counter Terrorism Department, for instance, showed that 7000 criminal acts were stopped to operate and 5000 criminal offence cases were identified through the help of CCT cameras. Furthermore, many crimes in, which mobile phones were used, are enormously controlled and resolved through digital technology, which was not possible in the past. If a person commit a crime and in such circumstances he or she used a mobile, his or her location can be easily traced through advance digital applications, which are used to access the location of a person. In other words, there are specific software, which are used as a trackers. A report by Michigan University, for example, showed that 12000 cases of criminal acts, commit through mobiles, were tracked alone in Washington DC. This was not possible before technological revolution, as there were no tracking applications in that time. In conclusion, crime rates is lowering these days than the past, owing to the presence of technology, which has limited and stopped crimes. I agree with this view, since through CCT cameras, many crimes can be prevented and resolved, as well as through advance tracking applications, crimes can be tracked
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is considered
that the
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crime
rate these days is getting decreases compared to the
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past
, owing to the advance
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technology
,
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through
which
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crime
can be
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prevented
and resolved. I
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agree
with this statement and this essay will discuss reasons for it.

Crime rate nowadays is
comparatively
lower than in the
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past
, due to the
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technology
inventions such as CCTV
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cameras
. In almost all sensitive areas and
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crowdy
places such as hospitals, universities, and shopping malls in
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big
cities, there are surveillance
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cameras
installed, which gives the recordings of the area and each moment activity can
be monitored
. This, in turn, means
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criminals
would not opt for any offensive
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move
, owing to the installed
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cameras
, and if they do any
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criminal
act, it can be
easily
traced. This means the suspect can be find out
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through
the recording saved in the
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cameras
.
However
, this was not the case in the
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past
, as there were no surveillance system at that time. A recent report by the International Counter Terrorism Department,
for instance
,
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showed
that 7000
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criminal
acts were
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stopped
to operate and 5000
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criminal
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offence
cases
were identified
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through
the
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help
of CCT cameras.

Furthermore
,
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many
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crimes
in, which mobile phones were
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used
, are
enormously
controlled and resolved
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through
digital
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technology
, which was not possible in the
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past
. If a person commit a
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crime
and in such circumstances he or she
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used
a mobile,
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his or her
location can be
easily
traced
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through
advance digital applications, which are
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used
to access the location of a person.
In other words
, there are specific software, which are
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used
as
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a trackers
. A report by Michigan University,
for example
,
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showed
that 12000 cases of
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criminal
acts, commit
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through
mobiles, were
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tracked
alone in Washington DC. This was not possible
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before
technological revolution, as there were no tracking applications in that time.

In conclusion
,
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crime
rates is lowering these days than the
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past
, owing to the presence of
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technology
, which has limited and
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stopped
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crimes
. I
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agree
with this view, since
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through
CCT
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cameras
,
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many
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crimes
can be
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prevented
and resolved,
as well
as
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through
advance tracking applications,
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crimes
can be
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tracked
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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