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The cost of prohibition: On spurt in hooch tragedies

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The deaths in the last few days of at least 25 people in Bihar’s Gopalganj and West Champaran districts and five in Muzaffarpur apart from several others taking ill after consuming spurious liquor points to the unintended but not unexpected consequences of the total prohibition law that has been in effect in the State for more than five years. Hooch tragedies such as these are a consequence of the unregulated production and sale of liquor via the black market, and the use of illicit liquor as a substitute due to the lack of the sale of over-the-counter and regulated drinks. Prohibition as a policy has been shown up as inadequate to curb the problem of alcoholism and the havoc wreaked by it on households due to excessive consumption for a variety of reasons in State after State. In Bihar, implementation has not been without immense public support, especially among rural women. Yet, despite significant steps taken to enhance enforcement by officials from the excise department, the police and local administration — over 3. 46 lakh people arrested in the last five years and close to 150 lakh litres of country-made and Indian Made Foreign Liquor being seized from April 2016 to February 2021 — weaknesses in imposing the ban persist. It is well known that one of the negative externalities of prohibition is the creation of a parallel bootlegger economy that could lead to an increase in violent crime, and this seems to be borne out in Bihar as well. The Chief Minister, Nitish Kumar, has been the strongest proponent of prohibition in the State and the policy has reaped electoral dividends for his party, the Janata Dal (United) and its ally, the Bharatiya Janata Party, as rural women have overwhelmingly welcomed the ban on alcohol. While initially, the ban on alcohol consumption helped rural households increase expenditure on basic goods related to food and education, there are reports from rural Bihar showing how these benefits have waned as spurious consumption is on the rise. Reportedly, illicit liquor in the State claimed at least 60 lives in 2021, much higher than the six deaths recorded by the National Crime Records Bureau’s report on accidental deaths and suicides in India in 2020. The scale of the rise in hooch incidents and deaths should set alarm bells ringing about the inability of the administration in curbing the black market in liquor sales and consumption. Mr. Kumar insists that the success of prohibition is only a matter of implementation of the law and in a way has blamed the deaths on the ignorance of those who consumed spurious liquor. But the fact that these deaths persist should alert the government to the misgivings with the idea of total prohibition as a magic bullet in a State marked by weaknesses in institutions and low overall human development.
The deaths in the last few days of at least 25
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people
in Bihar’s
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Gopalganj
and West
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Champaran
districts and five in
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Muzaffarpur
apart from several others taking ill after consuming spurious
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liquor
points to the unintended
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but
not unexpected consequences of the total
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prohibition
law that has been in effect in the
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State
for more than five years. Hooch tragedies such as these are a consequence of the unregulated production and sale of
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liquor
via the black market, and the
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use
of illicit
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liquor
as a substitute due to the lack of the sale of over-the-counter and regulated drinks.
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Prohibition
as a policy has
been shown
up as inadequate to curb the problem of alcoholism and the havoc wreaked by it on households due to excessive
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consumption
for a variety of reasons in
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State
after
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State
. In Bihar, implementation has not been without immense public support,
especially
among
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rural
women.
Yet
, despite significant steps taken to enhance enforcement by officials from the excise department, the police and local administration — over 3. 46 lakh
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people
arrested in the last five years and close to 150 lakh
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litres
of country-made and Indian Made Foreign
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Liquor
being seized
from April 2016 to February 2021 — weaknesses in imposing the ban persist. It is well known that one of the
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negative
externalities of
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prohibition
is the creation of a parallel bootlegger economy that could lead to an increase in violent crime, and this seems to
be borne
out in Bihar
as well
.

The Chief Minister,
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Nitish
Kumar, has been the strongest proponent of
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prohibition
in the
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State
and the policy has reaped electoral dividends for his party, the
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Janata
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Dal
(United) and its ally, the
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Bharatiya
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Janata
Party, as
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rural
women have
overwhelmingly
welcomed the ban on alcohol. While
initially
, the ban on alcohol
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consumption
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helped
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rural
households increase expenditure on basic
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goods
related to food and education, there are reports from
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rural
Bihar showing how these benefits have waned as spurious
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consumption
is on the rise. Reportedly, illicit
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liquor
in the
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State
claimed at least 60
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lives
in 2021, much higher than the six deaths recorded by the National Crime Records Bureau’s report on accidental deaths and suicides in India in 2020. The scale of the rise in hooch incidents and deaths should set alarm bells ringing about the inability of the administration in curbing the black market in
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liquor
sales and
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consumption
. Mr. Kumar insists that the success of
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prohibition
is
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only
a matter of implementation of the law and in a way has blamed the deaths on the ignorance of those who consumed spurious
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liquor
.
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the fact that these deaths persist should alert the
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government
to the misgivings with the
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idea
of total
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prohibition
as a magic bullet in a
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State
marked by weaknesses in institutions and low
overall
human development.
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IELTS essay The cost of prohibition: On spurt in hooch tragedies

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