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The college years are the best time in a person's life. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons to support your opinion. v.1

The college years are the best time in a person's life. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 1
It is believed by some experts that learning a foreign language at primary school is a better practice than beginning it at secondary school. There are obviously some advantages & disadvantages of this advised practice. Firstly, children all over the world normally learn English alongside their native words at an early age. As English is the most common International way of expressing oneself in the whole world, the importance of learning can hardly be ignored. However, it is true in some cases that trying to teach the children a totally new language could be a burden on them. It is not easy for all the children to accept learning an offshore language at such an age. Some take time to get accustomed to new things, some don't. When we were kids, any extra homework or task would seem like a severe torture for us. That's because we all loved to spend time on playing & enjoying our infancy rather than being deeply involved in enrolling a new medium of communication. That's why some prefer to get them acquainted with a foreign language at their secondary institutional life. On the other hand, if such an initiative is taken at secondary phase, it might not influence the person what it would bring impact during one's tender age. There is much more pressure of academic life on the infants in their secondary level rather than primary stage. Additionally, their brain can't catch the new words along with new grammatical rules. If I say from my own experience, I still remember the English poems I learnt in my childhood. Furthermore, I am able to use English whenever I talk with others or express myself with them. That has been possible as I gained the knowledge of English in depth when I was in primary school. But later, when I tried to learn a new overseas language I faced a lot more difficulties to adjust to a completely new way of communication. To conclude, it is obvious that how important it is to learn a foreign language at primary school instead of learning it at secondary school. Undoubtedly, the advantages of the belief of the experts outweigh the disadvantages.
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is believed
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some
experts that
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learning
a foreign
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language
at
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primary
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school
is a better practice than beginning it at
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secondary
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school
. There are
obviously
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some
advantages & disadvantages of this advised practice.

Firstly
, children all over the world
normally
learn English alongside their native words at an early age. As English is the most common International way of expressing oneself in the whole world, the importance of
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learning
can hardly be
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ignored
.
However
, it is true in
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some
cases that trying to teach the children a
totally
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new
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language
could be a burden on them. It is not easy for all the children to accept
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learning
an offshore
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language
at such an age.
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take time to
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get
accustomed to
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new
things,
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some
don't. When we were kids, any extra homework or task would seem like a severe torture for us. That's
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because
we all
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loved
to spend time on playing & enjoying our infancy
rather
than being
deeply
involved in enrolling a
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new
medium of communication. That's why
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some
prefer to
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get
them acquainted with a foreign
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language
at their
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secondary
institutional life.

On the other hand
, if such an initiative
is taken
at
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secondary
phase, it might not influence the person what it would bring impact during one's tender age. There is much more pressure of academic life on the infants in their
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secondary
level
rather
than
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primary
stage.
Additionally
, their brain can't catch the
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new
words along with
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new
grammatical
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rules
. If I say from my
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own
experience, I
still
remember the English poems I
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learnt
in my childhood.
Furthermore
, I am able to
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use
English whenever I talk with others or express myself with them. That has been possible as I gained the knowledge of English in depth when I was in
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primary
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school
.
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But
later, when I tried to learn a
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new
overseas
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language
I faced a lot more difficulties to adjust to a completely
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new
way of communication.

To conclude
, it is obvious that how
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important
it is to learn a foreign
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language
at
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primary
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school
instead
of
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learning
it at
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secondary
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school
.
Undoubtedly
, the advantages of the belief of the experts outweigh the disadvantages.
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IELTS essay The college years are the best time in a person's life. Give reasons to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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