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The college is considering a proposal from the dean's office that would increase the physical education requirement of the core curriculum from one course to two courses. If approved by a vote of the administration, the new requirement will becom v.1

The college is considering a proposal from the dean's office that would increase the physical education requirement of the core curriculum from one course to two courses. If approved by a vote of the administration, the new requirement will becom v. 1
In the past things used to be different, but nowadays things have changed rapidly, as the modern lifestyle, encouraging more and more people eat ready lunch rather than home made items. In my opinion ready food has numerous drawbacks, but benefits as well, will discuss in the following essay. There is no doubt that ready made food is available at your doorstep at any time. Individuals are busy throughout the day for working and studying. Though they are full time active and involved in their work circle, but have not enough time to spend themselves in preparation of feed. Therefore, they prefer outside food from home for convenience. As there is plenty of available every category of delicious menu, which are loved by younger to older one. Unfortunately, this is the only advantage of ready food. Considering the examples of fast service of pizza hut and food panda who are responsible for delivering a wide range of online food with a single click reached in a minimum time. Conversely, people who regularly consume themselves fast food suffer from various health problems like obesity, high cholesterol level, cardiovascular disease and hormonal imbalance. Regardless of the quality of outside food, using a high content of additives or preservatives which eventually decreases the presence of proteins and vitamins. Furthermore, the raw-material and finished products sometimes stored in the freezer for longer use which also causes heart problems. Whereas home made items are prepared more hygienic environment and decreases the ratio of health problems. Thus, Home made food is the best way to eat cuisine. For example, Most of the people deliver home made food for giving the good health of people. Like, food delivering to outside the factories, offices for hygienic point of view. To conclude, after analysing the situation, it is not hard to see that ready made eatables has more disadvantages than advantages, but it certainly makes our life more comfortable. Unfortunately, it has also made us unhealthy by depriving essential nutrients.
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used
to be
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different
,
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but
nowadays things have
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changed
rapidly
, as the modern lifestyle, encouraging more and more
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people
eat
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ready
lunch
rather
than home made items. In my opinion
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ready
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food
has numerous drawbacks,
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but
benefits
as well
, will discuss in the following essay.

There is no doubt that
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ready made
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food
is available at your doorstep at any time. Individuals are busy throughout the day for working and studying. Though they are full time active and involved in their work circle,
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but
have not
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enough
time to spend themselves in preparation of feed.
Therefore
, they prefer outside
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food
from home for convenience. As there is
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plenty
of available every category of delicious menu, which are
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loved
by younger to older one. Unfortunately, this is the
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only
advantage of
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ready
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food
. Considering the examples of
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fast
service of
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pizza hut
and
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food
panda who are responsible for delivering a wide range of online
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food
with a single click reached in a minimum time.

Conversely
,
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people
who
regularly
consume themselves
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fast
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food
suffer from various health problems like obesity, high cholesterol level, cardiovascular disease and hormonal imbalance. Regardless of the quality of outside
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food
, using a high content of additives or preservatives which
eventually
decreases the presence of proteins and vitamins.
Furthermore
, the raw-material and finished products
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sometimes
stored in the freezer for longer
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use
which
also
causes heart problems. Whereas home made items
are prepared
more hygienic environment and decreases the ratio of health problems.
Thus
, Home made
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food
is the best way to eat cuisine.
For example
, Most of the
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people
deliver home made
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food
for giving the
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good
health of
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people
. Like,
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food
delivering to outside the factories, offices for hygienic point of view.

To conclude
, after
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analysing
the situation, it is not
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hard
to
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see
that
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ready made
eatables has more disadvantages than advantages,
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but
it
certainly
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makes
our life more comfortable. Unfortunately, it has
also
made us unhealthy by depriving essential nutrients.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The college is considering a proposal from the dean's office that would increase the physical education requirement of the core curriculum from one course to two courses. If approved by a vote of the administration, the new requirement will becom v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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