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The chart below shows the waste disposal in 1 European country in four years 2005, 2006, 2007 and 2008 v.1

The chart below shows the waste disposal in 1 European country in four years 2005, 2006, 2007 and 2008 v. 1
It is an unfortunate scene to visualize people ignoring the significance of the natural world. While technological advancements owns the criticism for distancing people from nature, numerous awareness campaigns can be launched to resolve this issue from the grass root level. This technology driven era has created many chaos already and isolating people from mother nature has been yet another disheartening event. To explicate this further, many tech savvy people are bound to their machines owning to the entertainment it enables or the abundance of unaccomplished work load. Therefore, it is evident that people turn a blind-eye towards mother nature. For instance, Salarjung museum in India is one such example, as it hosts a plethora of shows which highlights the mother nature's elegant beauty by leveraging the latest technology which amuses the public in an artificial way. However, establishing renowned campaigns to raise the awareness about the exorbitant nature's beauty is one such measure which would eradicate the ignorance in people. Also various media driven technological sources can be utilized to sky-rocket the popularity of this awareness campaign. As an example, this reminds me of such event, called Jago Grahak (wakeup public) which gained tremendous popularity in India, thereby, 1 million plants were planted in 2015 due to this successful campaign. In conclusion, it is an undeniable fact that technology had played a vital role in creating the void space between the human race and the nature, whereas, numerous awareness campaigns will ensure that this void space can be negated to a wider extent.
It is an unfortunate scene to visualize
people
ignoring the significance of the natural world. While technological advancements
owns
the criticism for distancing
people
from
nature
, numerous
awareness
campaigns
can
be launched
to resolve this issue from the grass root level.

This technology driven era has created
many chaos
already and isolating
people
from mother
nature
has been
yet
another disheartening
event
. To explicate this
further
,
many
tech savvy
people
are bound
to their machines owning to the entertainment it enables or the abundance of unaccomplished work load.
Therefore
, it is evident that
people
turn a blind-eye towards mother
nature
.
For instance
,
Salarjung
museum in India is one such example, as it hosts a plethora of
shows
which highlights the mother nature's elegant beauty by leveraging the latest technology which amuses the public
in an artificial way
.

However
, establishing renowned
campaigns
to raise the
awareness
about the exorbitant nature's beauty is one such measure which would eradicate the ignorance in
people
.
Also
various media driven technological sources can
be utilized
to sky-rocket the popularity of this
awareness
campaign
. As an example, this reminds me of such
event
, called
Jago
Grahak
(
wakeup
public) which gained tremendous popularity in India, thereby, 1 million plants
were planted
in 2015 due to this successful campaign.

In conclusion
, it is an undeniable fact that technology had played a vital role in creating the void space between the human race and the
nature
, whereas, numerous
awareness
campaigns
will ensure that this void space can
be negated
to a wider extent.
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IELTS essay The chart below shows the waste disposal in 1 European country in four years 2005, 2006, 2007 and 2008 v. 1

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