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In the last decade there has been an increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults While welcomed as a great opportunity by many students other students see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching What are the v.1

In the last decade there has been an increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults While welcomed as a great opportunity by many students other students see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching What are the v. 1
Many urban area's population is exceeding their capacity, making it inevitable to build new houses in the countryside. In my opinion, this is only justified if governors ensure the least damage to the ecosystem of the area, while at the same time, control the population growth, so less houses will be needed in the future. The overpopulation chiefly occurs where residents can enjoy a quality life or the prices of staple commodities are relatively cheap. Residents of such cities have less to worry about when they decide to get married or bring children. As well as this, young adults tend to move from rural areas to such cities in search for a decent job most of which manage to stay and start a family, contributing to the exceeding population. When the population expands to an extend that the demand for houses exceeds its supply, the housing price skyrockets, leaving governments no choice but to build a set of new apartments in the countryside. This unwelcome development is likely to threaten the ecosystem of the surrounding area. New mass apartments in the countryside entail destroying parts of the nature. The reduction of green areas and trees is most probably tantamount to uncontrollable air pollution. It is as simple as it sounds, more people means more transportation and, therefore, exhaust emits into the air faster than it can be absorbed by green leaves which now there are less of them. The extra population also leads to overexploitation of water resources. Over time this may drain these irreplaceable resources. Hence, careless mass construction in the countryside could bring about devastating consequences. In conclusion, the development of houses in the countryside is merely acceptable when no better choice is available as it damages the ecosystem triggering several problems in the long run. Thus, city governors are expected to anticipate the troublesome population growth, well-ahead, and take measures to effectively manage the situation and not wait until they are forced to destroy natural setting to house their citizens.
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Many
urban area's
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population
is exceeding their capacity, making it inevitable to build new
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houses
in the
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countryside
. In my opinion, this is
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only
justified if governors ensure the least damage to the ecosystem of the
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area
, while at the same time, control the
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population
growth,
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so
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less
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houses
will
be needed
in the future.

The overpopulation
chiefly
occurs where residents can enjoy a quality life or the prices of staple commodities are
relatively
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cheap
. Residents of such cities have less to worry about when they decide to
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get
married or bring children.
As well
as this, young adults tend to
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move
from rural
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areas
to such cities in search for a decent job most of which manage to stay and
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start
a family, contributing to the exceeding
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population
. When the
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population
expands to
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an extend
that the demand for
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houses
exceeds its supply, the housing price skyrockets, leaving
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governments
no choice
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but
to build a set of new apartments in the countryside.

This unwelcome development is likely to threaten the ecosystem of the surrounding
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area
. New mass apartments in the
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countryside
entail destroying parts of the nature. The reduction of green
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areas
and trees is most
probably
tantamount to uncontrollable air pollution. It is as simple as it sounds, more
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people
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means
more transportation and,
therefore
, exhaust emits into the air faster than it can
be absorbed
by green
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leaves
which
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now
there are less of them. The extra
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population
also
leads to overexploitation of water resources. Over time this may drain these irreplaceable resources.
Hence
, careless mass construction in the
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countryside
could bring about devastating consequences.

In conclusion
, the development of
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houses
in the
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countryside
is
merely
acceptable when no better choice is available as it damages the ecosystem triggering several problems in the long run.
Thus
, city governors are
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expected
to anticipate the troublesome
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population
growth, well-ahead, and take measures to
effectively
manage the situation and not wait until they
are forced
to
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destroy
natural setting to
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house
their citizens.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In the last decade there has been an increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults While welcomed as a great opportunity by many students other students see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching What are the v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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