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The chart below shows the amount of area used for growing grains between 1990 and 2010 in a state in Canada v.1

The chart below shows the amount of area used for growing grains between 1990 and 2010 in a state in Canada v. 1
Such are negative consequences of our works on the environment, that many experts agree that significant global warming is devastating. As a result, we need some constructive approaches to solve or alleviate the problem. In this essay we will discuss the reasons why climate change is occurring and we will come up some solutions to address it. The major issues are the high amount of greenhouse gasses in the earth layers and deforestation. Due to burning fossil fuel CO2 release. CO2 emission plays a key role in ozone layer depletion, which is the logical reason for global warming. There are myriad power plants around the world which are using fossil fuel. This release thousands of tons of CO2 into the atmosphere every year. In addition, transportation is placed in the second source of producing co2. On the other hand, we are dealing with deforestation, which is causing a large amount of carbon dioxide to remain in the atmosphere. As far as co2 emission is concerned, there are some solutions for coping with this problem. Firstly, Authorities should encourage companies and factories to use renewable energies instead of fossil fuels. Secondly in terms of individual solutions, we can change our lifestyles like reducing disposal production as well as using electricity in an optimal way. Plus, installing green energy producing equipment and planting some trees in our house could be some great approaches. To make a long story short, although climate change has had a destroying effect on our life in recent years, we can address this issue and reduce the impacts on this problem by implementing some essay solutions.
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constructive approaches to solve or alleviate the problem. In this essay we will discuss the reasons why climate
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The major issues are the high amount of greenhouse gasses in the earth layers and deforestation. Due to burning fossil fuel CO2 release. CO2 emission plays a key role in ozone layer depletion, which is the logical reason for global warming. There are myriad power plants around the world which are using fossil fuel. This release thousands of tons of CO2 into the atmosphere every year.
In addition
, transportation
is placed
in the second source of producing co2.
On the other hand
, we are dealing with deforestation, which is causing a large amount of carbon dioxide to remain in the atmosphere.

As far as co2 emission
is concerned
, there are
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some
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solutions
for coping with this problem.
Firstly
, Authorities should encourage
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companies
and factories to
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use
renewable energies
instead
of fossil fuels.
Secondly
in terms of individual
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solutions
, we can
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change
our lifestyles like reducing disposal production
as well
as using electricity
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in an optimal way
. Plus, installing green energy producing equipment and planting
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some
trees in our
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house
could be
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great approaches.

To
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make
a long story short, although climate
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change
has had a destroying effect on our life in recent years, we can address this issue and
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reduce
the impacts on this problem by implementing
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some
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IELTS essay The chart below shows the amount of area used for growing grains between 1990 and 2010 in a state in Canada v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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