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The chart below shows information about average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where releva v.1

The chart below shows information about average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with average house prices in 1989.
In the past few years, globalization has grown at a rapid rate. As compared to the older times, now people have started imitating each other style and festivals too are becoming common. This can be considered as a positive change due to a plethora of reasons, however there are some demerits too. The first and foremost reason behind this is growing number of multinational organizations. For instance, people working in such industries, travel to many countries, thus they start following other nations' traditions. Secondly, technology has also played a paramount role in this trend. To illustrate, in today's age and time, other countries products can be easily bought while sitting at home. Hence, people are inclined to other culture. There are several benefits of having a similar culture across the world. One of the chief advantage is that it is easy to relocate to the other country. In old time, people feared to move to another nation due to difference in living style. Another benefit is that there will be less discrimination on the basis of language and residency. However, there are apparent reasons why some people do not find it advantageous. Firstly, it will impact tourism of many countries as tourists visit foreign country just to experience different cultures, so if there will be similar culture around the world then there will be no point left to visit others. In conclusion, growing similarities across the world is good for the individuals as well as nations. It is always beneficial to adopt good things from others, but one should not forget their roots.
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There are several benefits of having a similar culture across the world. One of the chief advantage is that it is easy to relocate to the
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The chart below shows information about average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with average house prices in 1989.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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