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The chart below gives information on how much people in the United States and United Kingdom spend on petrol v.1

The chart below gives information on how much people in the United States and United Kingdom spend on petrol v. 1
Borrowed clothes amongst youngsters have become increasingly popular in the past few years. This essay will argue that one of the reasons for this to happen is because the older clothes are now becoming new fashion trends and I believe that this is totally a positive development because this saves a lot of money for an individual. Younger individuals now prefer second-hand clothes because they are more conscious about the latest fashion trends of creating a new look with older clothes. Young people prefer mixing and matching dresses that they had borrowed from their friends and relatives or sometimes even by reusing their own older clothes which changes the attire completely and very often people do not believe that they have reused their garments. For example, the deciding factor for entrance into the National Institute of Fashion Technology is a task of creating a completely different look from the second-hand clothes given to its applicants. Reusing clothes have the benefit of saving money, which can be used elsewhere by the younger members of the society. That is to say that by decreasing their spendings on new dresses which are often priced high, they are able to ease their monthly budget. These youngsters now have a lot of savings that they can spend on other fun activities like parties, adventure sports and also on vacations. For instance, a recent survey by a popular travel magazine reported that 59% of the youngsters prefer spending on travelling rather than buying new clothes which they will compensate by reusing borrowed once. In conclusion, reusing borrowed clothes has become more common among young people because they see this as a new fashion trend and it saved them a lot of money which is totally a benefiting development.
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Borrowed
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clothes
amongst youngsters have become
increasingly
popular in the past few years. This essay will argue that one of the reasons for this to happen is
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because
the older
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clothes
are
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now
becoming
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new
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fashion
trends and I believe that this is
totally
a
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positive
development
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because
this saves
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a lot of
money for an individual.

Younger individuals
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now
prefer second-hand
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clothes
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because
they are more conscious about the latest
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fashion
trends of creating a
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new
look with older
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clothes
. Young
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people
prefer mixing and matching dresses that they had
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borrowed
from their friends and relatives or
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sometimes
even by reusing their
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own
older
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clothes
which
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changes
the attire completely and
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very
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often
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people
do not believe that they have reused their garments.
For example
, the deciding factor for entrance into the National Institute of
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Fashion
Technology is a task of creating a completely
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different
look from the second-hand
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clothes
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given
to its applicants.

Reusing
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clothes
have the benefit of saving money, which can be
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used
elsewhere by the younger members of the society.
That is
to say that by decreasing their
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spendings on
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new
dresses which are
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often
priced high, they are able to
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ease
their monthly budget. These youngsters
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now
have
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a lot of
savings that they can spend on other fun activities like parties, adventure sports and
also
on vacations.
For instance
, a recent survey by a popular travel magazine reported that 59% of the youngsters prefer spending on travelling
rather
than buying
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new
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clothes
which they will compensate by reusing
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borrowed
once.

In conclusion
, reusing
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borrowed
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clothes
has become more common
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among
young
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people
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because
they
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see
this as a
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new
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fashion
trend and it saved them
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a lot of
money which is
totally
a benefiting development.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below gives information on how much people in the United States and United Kingdom spend on petrol v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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