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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 2016, and future projections for 2025. v.1

The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 2016, and future projections for 2025. v. 1
Nowadays, advertisements can be seen everywhere and have indeed become an indispensable part of economic development. However, whether the pros outweigh the cons of it remains a controversial issue. I agree with the view that despite a number of shortcomings, we cannot just discard the useful tools. First, it is obvious that bridging the gap between the consumers and manufacturers, no matter how far the distance is, is the adverts’ primary function. Internet adverts, for example, can precisely deliver the information about products to the target audience even across the countries. So this kind of adverts maximise the functionality of disseminating the production information to the final consumers. Moreover, the delicate and well-designed advertisements can always be able to evoke the customers’ impulse buying, boot the sales and finally in some way promote the economic growth. In such circumstances, buyers will probably be induced by adverts and consequently buy more things than they need. Therefore, adverts definitely help develop the booming economy. That is not to say that the adverts are flawless in the market. Due to the expensive adverts fees, the cost will of course be added to the price of goods at last, and thus be paid by the buyers. Furthermore, as almost all the adverts will claim the product’s advantages only, the customers will get the unjust information and can easily be misled when making purchase decision. Finally, the existence of too much advertisements distracts the attention of viewers or audience and spoil the fun of watching TV. In conclusion, advertisement has now become the most effective marketing tools used all over the world; meanwhile, though the pros clearly outweigh the cons, the problems should be handled by efforts. Only by doing so can we ensure that the consumers will get the needed products in the most effortless and impartial way.
Nowadays,
advertisements
can be
seen
everywhere and have
indeed
become an indispensable part of economic development.
However
, whether the pros outweigh the cons of it remains a controversial issue. I
agree
with the view that despite a number of shortcomings, we cannot
just
discard the useful tools.

First
, it is obvious that bridging the gap between the consumers and manufacturers, no matter how far the distance is, is the adverts’ primary function. Internet adverts,
for example
, can
precisely
deliver the information about products to the target audience even across the countries.
So
this kind of adverts
maximise
the functionality of disseminating the production information to the final consumers.
Moreover
, the delicate and well-designed
advertisements
can always be able to evoke the customers’ impulse buying, boot the sales and
finally
in
some
way
promote the economic growth. In such circumstances, buyers will
probably
be induced
by adverts and
consequently
buy
more things than they need.
Therefore
, adverts definitely
help
develop the booming economy.

That is
not to say that the adverts are flawless in the market. Due to the expensive adverts fees, the cost will
of course
be
added
to the price of
goods
at last, and
thus
be paid
by the buyers.
Furthermore
, as almost all the adverts will claim the product’s advantages
only
, the customers will
get
the unjust information and can
easily
be misled
when making
purchase
decision.
Finally
, the existence of too
much
advertisements
distracts the attention of viewers or audience and spoil the fun of watching TV.

In conclusion
,
advertisement
has
now
become the most effective marketing tools
used
all over the world; meanwhile, though the pros
clearly
outweigh the cons, the problems should
be handled
by efforts.
Only
by doing
so
can we ensure that the consumers will
get
the needed products in the most effortless and impartial way.
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IELTS essay The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, 2016, and future projections for 2025. v. 1

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304 words
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