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The chart about the number and the purpose made by men and women

The chart about the number and the purpose made by men and women OwdEN
The graph illustrates the amount and purpose of travel for both sexes broken down into six reasons in a particular European country. It is clear that men travel more than women, for both sport, leisure and work purposes. It shows that going to work is the main reason for commuting for men, while women tend to go shopping the most. The number of trips made by men, at approximately 350, to work, is almost twice as high as that of women, recording the largest disparity. Similar amounts of travel were also found in sport and leisure, day trips, the least common reason to travel, where the number of trips was 70 and 60 respectively. In contrast, shopping was the main purpose of the majority of trips by women more than 250, which is about 60 more trips than men. In the end, both sexes made relatively comparable trips in terms of visiting friends, about 170 trips.
The graph illustrates the amount and purpose of
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for both sexes broken down into six reasons in a particular European country. It is
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men
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more than
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, for both sport, leisure and work purposes. It
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shows
that going to work is the main reason for commuting for
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men
, while
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tend to go shopping the most. The number of
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trips
made by
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men
, at approximately 350, to work, is almost twice as high as that of
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women
, recording the largest disparity. Similar amounts of
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travel
were
also
found in sport and leisure, day
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trips
, the least common reason to
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travel
, where the number of
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trips
was 70 and 60
respectively
.
In contrast
, shopping was the main purpose of the majority of
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trips
by
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women
more than 250, which is about 60 more
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trips
than
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men
. In the
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, both sexes made
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comparable
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trips
in terms of visiting friends, about 170
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IELTS essay The chart about the number and the purpose made by men and women

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
156 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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