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The char provides some information about the number of travelers in England every month in summer, 2013.

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The char provides some information about the number of travelers in England every month in summer, 2013. It can be clearly seen that there were different trends among places. For British Museum, it fluctuated significantly from about 600 to 650 between June and September in 2013. There was a gradual rise from June and July, and it rose to about 150 visitors. And then, the visitor number fell sharply from about 750 to 500 during the next two-month period. After that, it increased slightly to 650 in September. Natural History Museum, the number of people decreased steadily from about 550 to 400 between June and July, and then, this figure leveled off to August. There was a slight increase from August to September, this figure rose to about 100 visitors. The proportion of travelers at the Science Museum fell gradually to about 100 from June to August, and it rose significantly to 500 in September. It is clear that the traveler's number in British Museum was the highest figure in the three places, although it fluctuated sharply during the time. The figure of Science Museum’s visitors and Natural History Museum’s visitors reached the same point in September.
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of travelers in England every month in summer, 2013.

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seen
that there were
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trends among places. For British
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Museum
, it fluctuated
significantly
from about 600 to 650 between June and September in 2013. There was a gradual rise from June and July, and it rose to about 150
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visitors
. And then, the
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visitor
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number
fell
sharply
from about 750 to 500 during the
next
two-month period. After that, it increased
slightly
to 650 in September. Natural History
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Museum
, the
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number
of
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people
decreased
steadily
from about 550 to 400 between June and July, and then, this
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figure
leveled off to August. There was a slight increase from August to September, this
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figure
rose to about 100
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visitors
. The proportion of travelers at the Science
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Museum
fell
gradually
to about 100 from June to August, and it rose
significantly
to 500 in September.

It is
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clear
that the traveler's
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number
in British
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Museum
was the highest
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figure
in the three places, although it fluctuated
sharply
during the time. The
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figure
of Science
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Museum’s
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visitors
and Natural History
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Museum’s
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visitors
reached the same point in September.
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IELTS essay The char provides some information about the number of travelers in England every month in summer, 2013.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
197 words
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