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Governments should spend more money on medical research and less on researching the environment.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Governments should spend more money on medical research and less on researching the environment. dkPp7
In the modern era, both health research and environmental research have an essential role in countries'development. A group of individuals contemplate that authorities must more concentrate and utilize more amount on medical developments and at the same side environment research needs a less budget. I think that environment devlopment and medical research are equally important therefore I partially agree with this perspective. There are several reasons why I partially agree with this statement. To embark with, nowadays, it is undeniable that the necessity of the medical development is higher because the world needs more healthcare innovations to tackle many health realted problems. Furthermore, medical research has become a trend because of the change in technology and our lifestyle. If medical research get good support from the government, I will be beneficial for the nation's devlopment. For example, in the government of Norway, has been investing more money for the medical research for a long time. Consequently, they have developed various modern medical technologies. On the other hand, it is irrefutable that the importance of the environment research due to the fact through the environment studies people can develop sustainable strategies to protect the environment. In addition, it will create awareness among today's generation on pressing environmental problems. Notably, these days, individuals should need more awareness about the nature because many of them do not know the importance of the nature. For instance, several nations have made it mandatory for that the university or college students should complete a project about the environment research before thier graduation. To summarize, even though medical research is an important factor in country's development, I believe that environmental studies also equally essential therefore the government should spend money equally in both sides.
In the modern era, both health
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research
and environmental
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have an essential role in countries'development. A group of individuals
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contemplate
that authorities
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must
more concentrate and utilize more amount on
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medical
developments and at the same side
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environment
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research
needs a less budget. I
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think
that
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environment
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devlopment
and
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medical
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research
are
equally
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important
therefore
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partially
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agree
with this perspective.

There are several reasons why I
partially
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agree
with this statement. To embark with, nowadays, it is undeniable that the necessity of the
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medical
development is higher
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because
the world needs more healthcare innovations to tackle
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many health
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realted
problems.
Furthermore
,
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medical
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research
has become a trend
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because
of the
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change
in technology and our lifestyle. If
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medical
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research
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get
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good
support from the
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government
, I will be beneficial for the nation's
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devlopment
.
For example
, in the
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government
of Norway, has been investing more money for the
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medical
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research
for a long time.
Consequently
, they have developed various modern
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medical
technologies.

On the other hand
, it is irrefutable that the importance of the
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environment
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research
due to the fact through the
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environment
studies
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people
can develop sustainable strategies to protect the
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environment
.
In addition
, it will create awareness among
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today
's generation on pressing environmental problems.
Notably
, these days, individuals should need more awareness about the nature
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because
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many
of them do not know the importance of the nature.
For instance
, several nations have made it mandatory for that the university or college students should complete a project about the
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environment
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
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before
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thier
graduation.

To summarize
,
even though
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medical
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research
is an
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important
factor in country's development, I believe that environmental studies
also
equally
essential
therefore
the
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government
should spend money
equally
in both sides.
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IELTS essay Governments should spend more money on medical research and less on researching the environment.

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4 paragraphs
287 words
6.0
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