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The best way to resolve the international environmentalproblems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The best way to resolve the international environmentalproblems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 1
All over the world, flora and fauna are affected by human actions. It is argued by some that the damage is already done, while others hold the belief that restoration activities can still have a positive effect. Though the negative effects are undeniable, I'm of the opinion that there is still time to restore the ecosystem. Due to the worsening case of global warming and disruption of ecosystems, many people believe that we have already caused an irreversible damage to the several plant and animal species, inhabiting the planet. In other words, a major proportion of people are of the opinion that no amount of restoration work can effectively undo the damage already done. To illustrate, a significant number of animals and plants are on the endangered list, predicted to be extinct within the next decade. Though I agree that considerable damage has already been done, I believe that we should be more efficient with our restoration efforts. Another section of people debate that it is plausible to redo some of the damage caused, thus preventing further negative impact on the environment, by being efficient and vigilant with our strategies to protect the ecosystem. According to this view, it is vital that we find methods to limit the damage our actions cause, by preserving the natural habitats and decreasing Co2 emissions. For example, a recent journal published in a Japan University showed a significant improvement in the ecosystem, following the country's policy of limiting Co2 emissions. I strongly believe that there is still time to save the environment, if we act with intelligence and deliberation. Moreover, we can prevent further deterioration of the environment To conclude, though the opinions may vary regarding the availability of time, to have a positive effect on the flora and fauna of our world, I believe that we can protect our endangered species and bring about a positive change, if we choose to act now.
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by human actions. It
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some
that the
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damage
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already
done, while others hold the belief that restoration activities can
still
have a
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positive
effect. Though the
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negative
effects are undeniable, I'm of the opinion that there is
still
time to restore the ecosystem.

Due to the worsening case of global warming and disruption of ecosystems,
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many
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people
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believe
that we have
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already
caused an irreversible
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damage
to the
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several plant
and animal species, inhabiting the planet.
In other words
, a major proportion of
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people
are of the opinion that no amount of restoration work can
effectively
undo the
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damage
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already
done. To illustrate, a significant number of animals and plants are on the endangered list, predicted to be extinct within the
next
decade. Though I
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agree
that considerable
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damage
has
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already
been done
, I
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believe
that we should be more efficient with our restoration efforts.

Another section of
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people
debate that it is plausible to redo
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some of the
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damage
caused,
thus
preventing
further
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negative
impact on the environment, by being efficient and vigilant with our strategies to protect the ecosystem. According to this view, it is vital that we find methods to limit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
damage
our actions cause, by preserving the natural habitats and decreasing Co2 emissions.
For example
, a recent journal published in a Japan University
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
a significant improvement in the ecosystem, following the country's policy of limiting Co2 emissions. I
strongly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that there is
still
time to save the environment, if we act with intelligence and deliberation.
Moreover
, we can
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prevent
further
deterioration of the environment

To conclude
, though the opinions may vary regarding the availability of time, to have a
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positive
effect on the flora and fauna of our world, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that we can protect our endangered species and bring about a
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positive
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change
, if we choose to act
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now
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The best way to resolve the international environmentalproblems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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