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The best way to remove poverty in developing countries is to provide 6 years of free education to all children so that they can read, write and use numbers. Do you agree or disagree?

The best way to remove poverty in developing countries is to provide 6 years of free education to all children so that they can read, write and use numbers. Gk0e
Nowadays, poverty is hotly debatable subject in number of natoins. It is argued that, the excelsior approach to wipeout poorness in under developing nations is to give 6 years of education without any cost to all children hence they may eligible to read, write and play with numbers. I completely disagree with this notion and this essay will discuss realtable aspects in details. On the one hand, there are several other ways to decrease the poverty figures such as provide basic necessities to them including 6 years of free education. Because only having good academic knowledge is not helpful to reduce poverty in developing countries but it also needs fundamental services like food, shleter, clothes, and so on. Eventually, it helps them to maintain their pyhsical well-being and psychological well-being. Due to the fact of that, one might be able to do their job well either physically or mentally. Subsequently, it may lead to feed their family needs, indirectly it dwindled the poverty in particular nation. In addition, medical facilities should be also provided by government in case of illness to the needy people. Furthermore, government ought to support financially to the individuals who have backward financial background. As a result pupils gets motivations in order to finsh their discipline. Otherwise, they have to leave theri academics incomplete to give support to their family financially by doing number of diminished tasks. Thus, only free education not capable enough to reduce poorness in any nation. However, it is a bold step if the government open the gates for students to get 6 years free pedagogy. It somehow helps to decline the numbers of poverty in any country. In conclusion, personally, I think that, government ought to take all the possible steps to drop the statistics of poorness level in developing countries rather than providing only free education. I believe that, government should supply such a high quality failities such as computers and internet services towards the students who willingly want to learn something.
Nowadays,
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debatable subject in
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wipeout
poorness in under developing nations is to give 6 years of
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education
without any cost to all children
hence
they
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may eligible
to read, write and play with
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numbers
. I completely disagree with this notion and this essay will discuss
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realtable
aspects in
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details
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On the one hand, there are several other ways to decrease the
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poverty
figures such as provide
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basic necessities
to them including 6 years of
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free
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education
.
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only
having
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good
academic knowledge is not helpful to
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reduce
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poverty
in
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developing countries
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but
it
also
needs fundamental services like food,
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shleter
, clothes, and
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so
on.
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, it
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helps
them to maintain their
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pyhsical
well-being and psychological well-being. Due to the fact of that, one might be able to do their job well either
physically
or mentally.
Subsequently
, it may lead to feed their family needs,
indirectly
it dwindled the
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poverty
in particular
nation.
In addition
, medical facilities should be
also
provided by
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government
in case of illness to the needy
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people
.

Furthermore
,
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government
ought to support
financially
to the individuals who have backward financial background.
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a result pupils
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motivations in order to
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their discipline.
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, they
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have to
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theri
academics incomplete to give support to their family
financially
by doing
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number
of diminished tasks.
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,
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only
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free
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education
not capable
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enough
to
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reduce
poorness in any nation.
However
, it is a bold step if the
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government
open the gates for students to
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get
6 years
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free
pedagogy. It somehow
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helps
to decline the
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numbers
of
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poverty
in any country.

In conclusion
,
personally
, I
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think
that,
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government
ought to take all the possible steps to drop the statistics of poorness level in
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developing countries
rather
than providing
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only
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free
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education
. I believe that,
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government
should supply such a high quality
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failities
such as computers and internet services towards the students who
willingly
want to learn something.

IELTS essay The best way to remove poverty in developing countries is to provide 6 years of free education to all children so that they can read, write and use numbers.

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