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The best way to protect environment is to use local resources

The best way to protect environment is to use local resources 55oBD
Firstly, the main reason for importing different types of resources from abroad is the conducive environment for producing goods. In other words, foreign countries produce some of the equipment that our domestic environment is not conducive to; as a result, so many types of equipment are imported. For example, India imported some of the most precious metals and stones from the United States in 1945, which are produced only in the United States worldwide because the Americans have so much money available that it is impossible to make so many investments in India. Neither can be established in the agrarian considering low economy as a foremost reason or population growth. Only a few rich Indians can use such innumerable valuables. Hence, some foreign material is imported from abroad. Nevertheless, ordering some goods from abroad can be attributed to the lack of conservation of the nation. Put differently, the government of a country needs to invest a lot of money to import any property from abroad, which has a very adverse effect on the economy of the province. The regime can support the same amount in the modern and fundamental development of the environment. For instance, according to a survey conducted in India in 2020, the government had to spend Rs 2 crore to import material from abroad, and our economic situation deteriorated drastically. Thus, the loss of imports for the usage of any equipment from outside the country is sufficient to weaken the economic condition of the nation
Firstly
, the main reason for importing
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different
types of resources from
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abroad
is the conducive environment for producing
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goods
.
In other words
, foreign countries produce
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some of the
equipment that our domestic environment is not conducive to;
as a result
,
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so
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many
types of equipment
are imported
.
For example
, India imported
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some
of the most precious metals and stones from the United States in 1945, which
are produced
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only
in the United States worldwide
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because
the Americans have
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so
much money available that it is impossible to
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make
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so
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many
investments in India. Neither can
be established
in the agrarian considering low economy as a foremost reason or population growth.
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Only
a few rich Indians can
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use
such innumerable valuables.
Hence
,
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some
foreign material
is imported
from abroad.

Nevertheless
, ordering
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some
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goods
from
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abroad
can
be attributed
to the lack of conservation of the nation. Put
differently
, the
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government
of a country needs to invest
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a lot of
money to import any property from
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abroad
, which has a
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very
adverse effect on the economy of the province. The regime can support the same amount in the modern and fundamental development of the environment.
For instance
, according to a survey conducted in India in 2020, the
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government
had to spend Rs 2 crore to import material from
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abroad
, and our economic situation deteriorated
drastically
.
Thus
, the loss of imports for the usage of any equipment from outside the country is sufficient to weaken the economic condition of the nation

IELTS essay The best way to protect environment is to use local resources

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2 paragraphs
247 words
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