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The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all. with this statement? v. 1
Presently, each person lives in the turbulent times there every single day something changes, therefore all plans hang in uncertainty; as a result, people tend to not make a plan their rest. Overall, I partially agree with the topic statement because certain activities better plan, whereas others better realize spontaneously. One the one hand, people has been planning their activities since childhood that keep them always on guard, so people for weekend or vacation prefers to do something spontaneously, inasmuch as the rest means relax and relieve stress. For example, for weekdays each person has a schedule for work, school and other the plans, thereby on weekends they only grab clothes and go to the seashore or other peaceful place. Moreover, presently, a society has uncertain life with many of the force-majeures there for successful finishing of a plan need to correct it every time for a various reasons, unlike from a spontaneous decision that people realize in the last moment. Notwithstanding, certain activities of holidays, such as long travel with stop in hotels or other related with public transports and services, inevitably need to plan for evading stress. For example, the airplane depends on the weather, so a flight can be delayed or closed, or when you will arrive all hotels are able to full, especially if it happens in national holiday of the host country. Likewise, if a holiday plan is the long travel to an another city in the other region you need observed the weather for evading rain or storm on a seashore that can break all the rest. To conclude, I think it is awesome in our busy life does something immediately without an any plan; however, necessarily always heed that such activity time to time can be broken. Therefore, not planning partially good idea because for better result depending on distance and time.
Presently
, each person
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lives
in the turbulent
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times
there every single day something
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changes
,
therefore
all
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plans
hang in uncertainty;
as a result
,
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people
tend to not
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make
a
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plan
their rest.
Overall
, I
partially
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agree
with the topic statement
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because
certain
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activities
better
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plan
, whereas others better realize
spontaneously
.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the one hand,
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people
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has
been planning their
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activities
since childhood that
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keep
them always on guard,
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so
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people
for weekend or vacation prefers to do something
spontaneously
, inasmuch as the rest means relax and relieve
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stress
.
For example
, for weekdays each person has a schedule for work, school and
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other
the
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plans
, thereby on weekends they
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only
grab clothes and go to the seashore or
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other
peaceful place.
Moreover
,
presently
, a society has uncertain life with
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many
of the
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force-majeures
there for successful finishing of a
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plan
need to correct it every
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time
for a various
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reasons
, unlike from a spontaneous decision that
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people
realize in the last moment.

Notwithstanding, certain
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activities
of holidays, such as long travel with
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stop
in hotels or
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other
related with public transports and services,
inevitably
need to
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plan
for evading
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stress
.
For example
, the airplane depends on the weather,
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so
a flight can
be delayed
or closed, or when you will arrive all hotels are able to full,
especially
if it happens in national holiday of the host country.
Likewise
, if a holiday
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plan
is the long travel to
One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: "a city" or "another city".
an another city
in the
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other
region you need observed the weather for evading rain or storm on a seashore that can break all the rest.

To conclude
, I
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think
it is awesome in our busy life does something immediately without an any
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plan
;
however
,
necessarily
always heed that such
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activity
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time
to
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time
can
be broken
.
Therefore
, not planning
partially
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good
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idea
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because
for better result depending on distance and
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time
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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