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“The best way to learn English is to study with native teachers. ” What do you think about this opinion? State your point and give reasons and examples to support your answer. v.5

“The best way to learn English is to study with native teachers. ” What do you think about this opinion? State your point and give reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 5
Health is one of the most crucial aspects of someone’s success, which determines one’s growth and prosperity. Furthermore, sedentary lifestyle has become a common sight with the advancement of technology, which has resulted in many detrimental impacts on human’s life and thereby brings many health repercussions, which can be resolved by physical exercise. However, in many countries, doctors hold the opinion that people are not getting enough physical exercises. Therefore, I will highlight the causes and solution to this problem. To begin with, life can be miserable without a healthy lifestyle, but there are certain hindrances, which are responsible for not making people do any physical exercise. Firstly, this competitive world has made people very focused towards their work to accomplish a ladder of success, consequently, this work, dedication and commitment have reduced their time for recreational activities, especially for physical exercises. Secondly, the availability of everything due to the advent of technology has made people effortless and cynical, thus people do not want to engross themselves in physical exercises. For instance, it has been found in many surveys that many youngsters are under the threat of heart attack and obesity owing to lack of participation in physical exercise. However, every problem comes with a solution, which is similar in this case. This grim problem can be resolved with various initiatives. Firstly, long working hours in companies must mitigate to ensure some spare time for the employees so that they could indulge themselves in physical exercises. Besides, the government should aware people about the importance of health and the drastic impact of over usage of technology, and further establish a sports ground and many other physical exercises-related activities. Finally, the government should enforce stringent employment laws that help people to deduct their overtime work and make their work-life balance. In conclusion, a healthy person can merely contribute to the nation’s growth, therefore it is the responsibility of an individual to give some time to physical exercise, irrespective of thinking about money and so on.
Health is one of the most crucial aspects of someone’s success, which determines one’s growth and prosperity.
Furthermore
, sedentary lifestyle has become a common sight with the advancement of technology, which has resulted in
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many
detrimental impacts on human’s life and thereby brings
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many
health repercussions, which can
be resolved
by
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physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercise
.
However
, in
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many
countries, doctors hold the opinion that
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people
are not getting
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enough
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physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercises
.
Therefore
, I will highlight the causes and solution to this problem.

To
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begin
with, life can be miserable without a healthy lifestyle,
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but
there are certain hindrances, which are responsible for not making
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people
do any
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physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercise
.
Firstly
, this competitive world has made
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people
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very
focused towards their work to accomplish a ladder of success,
consequently
, this work, dedication and commitment have
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reduced
their time for recreational activities,
especially
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercises
.
Secondly
, the availability of everything due to the advent of technology has made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
effortless and cynical,
thus
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people
do not want to engross themselves in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercises
.
For instance
, it has
been found
in
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many
surveys that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
youngsters are under the threat of heart attack and obesity owing to lack of participation in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
exercise.

However
, every problem
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
with a solution, which is similar
in this case
. This grim problem can
be resolved
with various initiatives.
Firstly
, long working hours in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
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must
mitigate to ensure
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some
spare time for the employees
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so
that they could indulge themselves in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercises
.
Besides
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should aware
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
about the importance of health and the drastic impact of over usage of technology, and
further
establish a sports ground and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
exercises-related activities.
Finally
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should enforce stringent employment laws that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to deduct their overtime work and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their work-life balance.

In conclusion
, a healthy person can
merely
contribute to the nation’s growth,
therefore
it is the responsibility of an individual to give
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercise
, irrespective of thinking about money and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay “The best way to learn English is to study with native teachers. ” What do you think about this opinion? State your point and give reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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