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The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses Do you agree or disagree v.3

The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses v. 3
it is argued that upbringing new born infant is one of innate skills of parents. while I have to admit this perspective is accurate to somewhat extent, t still hold a notion that parents should undertake parenting courses due to myriad benefits of them. On the one hand, some people think that taking care of children is innate skill as soon as nature of each individual. this is to say, parents can study experiences and skills from their parent or relatives even their neighbour since this experiences is censored over many generations, it gradually becomes customs of families and regions. However, besides benefits are brought by this experiences, we should consider about some negative impacts on upbringing method, such as some of them are out-of-date and no more effect. Moreover, cultural influences can make parent’s methods is too draconian for children to follow. On the other hand, others who in favour of participating in parenting courses is the best way to guarantee the development of their children completely in their own justification. As a matter of fact, parenting courses are going to equip parents with necessary skills and general knowledges to help them deal with rasing their children. For instance, many first-time parents lack of knowledge as well as experiences in order to care for children. this courses will provide both proper instructions and scientific methods to educate children. Furthermore, it helps parent deal with troublesome teenagers who are misbehaving while going via adolescence and make tighten the bolt. To recapitulate, despite the benefits of traditional upbringing measures, I am strongly convinced parents ought to combine more than one method to attain best results.
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it
is argued
that upbringing new born infant is one of innate
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skills
of
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parents
.
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while
I
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have to
admit this perspective is accurate to somewhat extent, t
still
hold a notion that
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parents
should undertake parenting
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courses
due to myriad benefits of them.

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some
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people
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think
that taking care of
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children
is innate
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skill
as
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soon
as nature of each individual.
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this
is to say,
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parents
can study
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experiences
and
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skills
from their
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parent
or relatives even their
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neighbour
since
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this
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experiences
is censored
over
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many
generations, it
gradually
becomes customs of families and regions.
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,
besides
benefits
are brought
by
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this
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experiences
, we should consider about
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some
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negative
impacts on upbringing
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method
, such as
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some
of them are out-of-date and no more effect.
Moreover
, cultural influences can
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make
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parent’s
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methods
is too
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for
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children
to follow.

On the other hand
, others who in
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favour
of participating in parenting
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courses
is the best way to guarantee the development of their
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children
completely in their
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own
justification. As a matter of fact, parenting
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courses
are going to equip
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parents
with necessary
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skills
and general
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knowledges
to
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help
them deal with
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rasing
their
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children
.
For instance
,
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many
first
-time
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parents
lack of knowledge
as well
as
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experiences
in order to care for
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children
.
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this
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courses
will provide both proper instructions and scientific
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methods
to educate
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children
.
Furthermore
, it
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helps
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parent
deal with troublesome
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teenagers
who are misbehaving while going via adolescence and
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make
tighten the bolt.

To recapitulate, despite the benefits of traditional upbringing measures, I am
strongly
convinced
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parents
ought to combine more than one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
method
to attain best results.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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