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Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. v. 2
Yesterday I read an article about entitling artists with the right to present their vision unrestricted. However, this leads one to wonder whether it is reasonable to provide them with this opportunity. This essay agrees with the idea of entitlement. The first reason is that important issues in society can be reflected on their work of art. Problems in the public are difficult to reveal and understand, but with the ability of artists, it feasible to recognise them before they escalate into social crisis. By analyzing their work, governments could see what is happening in public and get concerned if the people are disappointed by something like a rise in prices or illegal actions by politicians. Another reason for artists being given the right to express themselves freely is that the level of cultural development is dependant on freedom in art. Culture thrive and become rich comprehensively unless the artists are restricted in their ideas. Thus, if the governemnt is interested in looking culturally developed in the world, it should not limit their rights and let them develop to the full. For example, many european countries pride themselves for their culture, since they allow their artists to express their thoughts nearly with no limits. However, some politicians claim that the government should restrict their right in some cases. This is because people in art occasionally go beyond moral norms. They may display sexual or violent images in their exhibitions and, therefore, negatively affect people' s psychological well-being. For example, in Europe, artists may present nude sculptures or scenes of torture and execution from the Middle Ages in the public places. Despite this, these images are part of the world history, and there is no need to fixate on them as something negative. On the contrary. they show how people lived in the past and what mistakes they made so that the current generate can learn and void them in the future. In conclusion, authorities should let artists express themselves limitlessly since it help develop socially and curturally.
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artists
with the
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right
to present their vision unrestricted.
However
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agrees
with the
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idea
of entitlement.

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first
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important
issues in society can
be reflected
on their work of art. Problems in the public are difficult to reveal and understand,
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but
with the ability of
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artists
, it feasible to
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recognise
them
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before
they escalate into social crisis. By analyzing their work,
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governments
could
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see
what is happening in public and
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get
concerned if the
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people
are disappointed
by something like a rise in prices or illegal actions by politicians.

Another reason for
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artists
being
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given
the
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right
to express themselves
freely
is that the level of cultural development is
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dependant
on freedom in art. Culture thrive and become rich
comprehensively
unless the
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artists
are restricted
in their
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ideas
.
Thus
, if the
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governemnt
is interested
in looking
culturally
developed in the world, it should not limit their
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rights
and
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let
them develop to the full.
For example
,
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many
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european
countries pride themselves for their culture, since they
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allow
their
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artists
to express their thoughts
nearly
with no limits.

However
,
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some
politicians claim that the
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government
should restrict their
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right
in
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some
cases. This is
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because
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people
in art
occasionally
go beyond moral norms. They may display sexual or violent images in their exhibitions and,
therefore
,
negatively
affect
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For example
, in Europe,
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artists
may present nude sculptures or scenes of torture and execution from the Middle Ages in the public places. Despite this, these images are part of the world history, and there is no need to fixate on them as something
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negative
.
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.
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they
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show
how
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people
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lived
in the past and what mistakes they made
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so
that the
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current
generate can learn and void them in the future.

In conclusion
, authorities should
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let
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artists
express themselves
limitlessly
since it
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help
develop
socially
and
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curturally
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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