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The benefits of living in the city

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Nowadays, people like living in the city because of its benefits. Firtly, there are more job oppirtunities in city. For example, there are many factories and companies in there, so there will be various jobs such as receptionnist and book-keeper. Secondly, this place has many endless entertaimant options. For instance, we can go to the cinema to eat popcorn and watching movies, or can go to shopping at the department store. Thirtly, in the city is very intetesting and diverse type of services such as cafes, restausants, barbershops, pet shops, flower shops, a fast food restaurant, . . . all are very convenient to sarve the need of everyone. Finally, if we are sick, we can go to the hospital. Moreover, we can receive education in school. I love this city very much, hope that in the future, the city will grow and become more and modern more.
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IELTS essay The benefits of living in the city

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
148 words
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