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The bar plot depicts three main exportation projections of Southland in the past, present, and future years.

The bar plot depicts three main exportation projections of Southland in the past, present, and future years. m2k9N
The bar plot depicts three main exportation projections of Southland in the past, present, and future years. Firstly, International tourism showed a constant raise of 1 billion from 2000 to 2021 and again from 2021 to 2025, there is an increase of one billion, which adds up to a difference of 2 billion on the whole that is from 8 billion to 10 billion. Secondly, In the past, there were only 7 billion exports during 2000, On the contrary, there is an extreme rise in the exports of dairy products that are around 10 billion exports approximately and future projections of dairy products show that it requires a bit less than the present that is only billion, however, the total difference is around 3 billion exports. Thirdly, the exportation of meat products has slightly fallen over the years from 6 billion exports to 5 billion from 2000 to 2025. The total difference between the exportation is around one billion. To conclude, International tourism is increasing constantly as well as it has more number of exports when compared with the other two main exports besides meat products exports are sunken over the year
The bar plot depicts three main exportation projections of Southland in the past, present, and future years.

Firstly
, International tourism
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a constant raise of 1
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billion
from 2000 to 2021 and again from 2021 to 2025, there is an increase of one
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billion
, which
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adds
up to a difference of 2
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billion
on the whole
that is
from 8
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billion
to 10 billion.

Secondly
, In the past, there were
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only
7
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billion
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exports
during 2000,
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, there is an extreme rise in the
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exports
of dairy
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products
that are around 10
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billion
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exports
approximately and future projections of dairy
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products
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show
that it requires a bit less than the present
that is
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only
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billion
,
however
, the total difference is around 3
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billion
exports.

Thirdly
, the exportation of meat
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products
has
slightly
fallen over the years from 6
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billion
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exports
to 5
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billion
from 2000 to 2025. The total difference between the exportation is around one billion.

To conclude
, International tourism is increasing
constantly
as well
as it has more number of
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exports
when compared with the other two main
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exports
besides
meat
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products
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exports
are sunken over the year
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IELTS essay The bar plot depicts three main exportation projections of Southland in the past, present, and future years.

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