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Discuss the causes of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society

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There is no doubt that an escalating of utilising narcotic among young generations crucial obstacle that we encounter our society. There are several factors that causes widespreading this sort of drugs all over the world. This essay will look at the reasons for this and propose some solutions. One of the main causes of the problem is that richness. That is to say, high rate of consuming drugs, observed among wealthy individuals compared with others in current time. For example, the rest of the rich take into consideration earning much more money instead of bringing up their children with proper education and well-manner. Having much more freedom and plenty of money teenager capture to attention such kind of drug addiction, crime. This lead to psychological difficulties, fatal diseases, destroying sipirit of health. Main important measure, foremost which needs to be taken by parents, take into account their children all the time and control their every actions especially in teenager period. Moreover, they should not pamper by giving a great deal of money. In addition, government must enforce strict laws to flight drugs. Another problem is that youngesters are prone to be more pliable toward such kind of substances due to having poor education, they are more vulnerable, so narcotic traders utilize this condition. As the result, tey are addicted to them and are not able to separate from drugs. Recieving narcotics constantly leads to mental health problem, depression even death. To tackle this issue, the government should control use of drugs and promoting more educational programmes. Another important measure is dopers should be punished like criminals. Then, people would remain further from drugs and things like that. To sum up, widespreading drugs use by young people in todays world. This is a serious problem and unless we can prevent this, our society will suffer. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the problem lies with parents and the government.
There is no doubt that an escalating of
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narcotic among young generations crucial obstacle that we encounter our society. There are several factors that causes
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widespreading
this sort of
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drugs
all over the world. This essay will look at the reasons for this and propose
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some
solutions. One of the main causes of the
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problem
is that richness.
That is
to say, high rate of consuming
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drugs
, observed among wealthy individuals compared with others in
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current
time.
For example
, the rest of the rich take into consideration earning much more money
instead
of bringing up their children with proper education and well-manner. Having much more freedom and
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plenty
of money
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teenager
capture to attention such kind of
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drug
addiction, crime. This lead to psychological difficulties, fatal diseases, destroying
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sipirit
of health. Main
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important
measure, foremost which needs to
be taken
by parents, take into account their children all the time and control their every
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actions
especially
in
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teenager
period.
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In addition
,
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government
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must
enforce strict laws to flight
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drugs
. Another
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problem
is that
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youngesters
are prone to be more pliable toward such kind of substances due to having poor education, they are more vulnerable,
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so
narcotic traders
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utilize
this condition. As the result,
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tey
are addicted
to them and are not able to separate from
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drugs
.
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Recieving
narcotics
constantly
leads to mental health
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problem
, depression even death. To tackle this issue, the
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government
should control
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use
of
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drugs
and promoting more educational
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programmes
. Another
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important
measure is dopers should
be punished
like criminals. Then,
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people
would remain
further
from
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drugs
and things like that. To sum up,
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widespreading
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drugs
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use
by young
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people
in
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todays
world. This is a serious
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problem
and unless we can
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prevent
this, our society will suffer. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the
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problem
lies with parents and the
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government
.
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IELTS essay Discuss the causes of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society

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321 words
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