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Throughoul the history, mole leoders olwoys leod us lo violence ond conflicl. lf o society is governed by female leoders, it witt be more peoceful. To whol exlenl do you ogree or disogree with this o pinion?

Throughoul the history, mole leoders olwoys leod us lo violence ond conflicl. lf o society is governed by female leoders, it witt be more peoceful. To whol exlenl do you ogree or disogree with this o pinion? xgpag
LOOKING INTO THE HISTORY, IT MIGHT BE CORRECT TO SAY THAT BOTH MEN OR WOMEN AS LEADERS HAVE LED TO VIOLENCE AND WAR ALONGWITH PEACE AND HARMONY. THUS, I DISAGREE TO THIS OPINION TO A CERTAIN EXTENT. IT IS GENERALLY BELIEVED THAT MEN ARE MORE AGGRESSIVE OR VIOLENT AS COMPARED TO WOMEN, BUT, IT MIGHT NOT ALWAYS BE TRUE. A BEAUTIFUL EXAMPLE WOULD BE OF MAHATMA GANDHI-THE MAN WHO CHOSE NON-VIOLENCE OVER VIOLENCE AND CONTRIBUTED TO INDIA’S INDEPENDENCE. ALTHOUGH, IF WE TAKE THE EXAMPLE OF BHAGAT SINGH, HE CHOSE VIOLENCE OVER NON-VIOLENT PROTESTS. SO IT WOULD BE SAFE TO SAY THAT IT DEPENDS ON A MAN’S IDEAS AND HIS WAYS OF EXPRESSION. THE ABOVE STATEMENT COULD BE TRUE FOR WOMEN TOO, LIKE, RANI LAKSHMI BAI OR JHANSI KI RANI CHOSE WAR OVER NEGOTIATION, INDICATING A VIOLENT NATURE. WHEREAS, KASTURBAI, WIFE OF MAHATMA GANDHI ALSO HELPED HIM AND SUPPORTED NON-VIOLENCE. FURTHERMORE, GENDER STEREOTYPING IS NOT A VERY GOOD REASON TO CLASSIFY OR IDENTIFY THE CHARACTERISTICS OF LEADERS. A GOOD LEADER, REGARDLESS OF WHAT GENDER THEY ARE, WOULD ALWAYS LOOK OUT FOR THEIR PEOPLE AND MAY EVEN FIGHT FOR THEM, VIOLENTLY OR NOT. THUS, WHAT MATTERS IS THE RESULT OF THE LEADERSHIP NOT THE STYLE OF LEADERSHIP. LEADERS MAY COME AND GO, BUT THEIR PRACTICES ARE REMEMBERED. SO, IT IS ALSO VERY IMPORTANT TO ADOPT A PARTICULAR PRACTICE AFTER PROPER PLANNING AND THINKING, AS WRONG DECISIONS MADE BY LEADERS MAY HAUNT THEM EVEN AFTER THEIR DEATH. FOR EXAMPLE, ADOLF HITLER ISS STILL CONSIDERED A VILLIAN DUE TO HIS UNNECESSARY VIOLENCE AND BHAGAT SINGH IS STILL CONSIDERED A HERO, DUE TO HIS THOUGHTFUL ACTS OF VIOLENCE FOR A GOOD CAUSE. THIS RE-EMPHAZIES MY DISAGREEMENT TOWARDS THE IDEA MENTIONED IN THE QUESTION.
LOOKING INTO THE HISTORY, IT MIGHT BE CORRECT TO SAY THAT BOTH
MEN
OR WOMEN AS
LEADERS
HAVE LED TO
VIOLENCE
AND WAR
ALONGWITH
PEACE AND HARMONY.
THUS
, I DISAGREE TO THIS OPINION TO A CERTAIN EXTENT.

IT IS
GENERALLY
BELIEVED THAT
MEN
ARE MORE AGGRESSIVE OR VIOLENT AS COMPARED TO WOMEN,
BUT
, IT MIGHT NOT ALWAYS BE TRUE. A
BEAUTIFUL
EXAMPLE WOULD BE OF MAHATMA GANDHI-THE
MAN
WHO CHOSE NON-VIOLENCE OVER
VIOLENCE
AND CONTRIBUTED TO INDIA’S INDEPENDENCE. ALTHOUGH, IF WE TAKE THE EXAMPLE OF
BHAGAT
SINGH, HE CHOSE
VIOLENCE
OVER NON-VIOLENT PROTESTS.
SO
IT WOULD BE SAFE TO SAY THAT IT DEPENDS ON A
MAN
’S
IDEAS
AND HIS WAYS OF EXPRESSION.

THE ABOVE STATEMENT COULD BE TRUE FOR WOMEN TOO, LIKE,
RANI
LAKSHMI
BAI
OR JHANSI
KI
RANI
CHOSE WAR OVER NEGOTIATION, INDICATING A VIOLENT NATURE. WHEREAS,
KASTURBAI
, WIFE OF MAHATMA GANDHI
ALSO
HELPED
HIM AND SUPPORTED NON-VIOLENCE.

FURTHERMORE
, GENDER STEREOTYPING IS NOT A
VERY
GOOD
REASON TO CLASSIFY OR IDENTIFY THE CHARACTERISTICS OF
LEADERS
. A
GOOD
LEADER
, REGARDLESS OF WHAT GENDER THEY ARE, WOULD ALWAYS LOOK OUT FOR THEIR
PEOPLE
AND MAY EVEN FIGHT FOR THEM,
VIOLENTLY
OR NOT.
THUS
, WHAT MATTERS
IS
THE RESULT OF THE LEADERSHIP NOT THE STYLE OF LEADERSHIP.

LEADERS MAY
COME
AND GO,
BUT
THEIR PRACTICES
ARE REMEMBERED
.
SO
, IT IS
ALSO
VERY
IMPORTANT
TO ADOPT A PARTICULAR PRACTICE AFTER PROPER PLANNING AND THINKING, AS
WRONG
DECISIONS MADE BY
LEADERS
MAY HAUNT THEM EVEN AFTER THEIR DEATH.
FOR EXAMPLE
, ADOLF HITLER ISS
STILL
CONSIDERED A
VILLIAN
DUE TO HIS UNNECESSARY
VIOLENCE
AND
BHAGAT
SINGH IS
STILL
CONSIDERED A HERO, DUE TO HIS THOUGHTFUL ACTS OF
VIOLENCE
FOR A
GOOD
CAUSE. THIS
RE-EMPHAZIES
MY DISAGREEMENT TOWARDS THE
IDEA
MENTIONED IN THE QUESTION.
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IELTS essay Throughoul the history, mole leoders olwoys leod us lo violence ond conflicl. lf o society is governed by female leoders, it witt be more peoceful. To whol exlenl do you ogree or disogree with this o pinion?

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