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The bar illustrates the proportion of profits made from seven different movie genres (adventure, comedy, action, drama, thriller, musicals, and animation) in the US in three years (1995, 2000, and 2005).

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The bar illustrates the proportion of profits made from seven different movie genres (adventure, comedy, action, drama, thriller, musicals, and animation) in the US in three years (1995, 2000, and 2005). In general, one can see probably that the audience preferred the first four movie genres provided in the list compared to just low rates for Thriller, Musicals, and Animation. Moreover, Action and Drama movies' figures seemed to go down over the 15 years period, Comedy was in contrast and the others fluctuated in the same period. In 1995, the majority of audiences prefer Drama movies, compared to Action and Adventure, which are a double lower than the first one (at around 15%). For Animation, started as the lowest rate of the first year, about 4%, then grew up slightly to just under 10%. Comedy movies had the same pattern, increasing gradually from 20% to about 27% to the highest preferable genre at the end of the period. In 2000, the Adventure had an insignificant decrease before hitting its highest point at nearly 25%. In contrast, Thriller and Musical movies had a little change in the middle of the period but then shrink to just under 5% of audiences. In 2005, both Action and Drama movies plummeted over 15 years, to hit a low of about 13% and 15% relatively.
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movies' figures seemed to go down over the 15 years period, Comedy was
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IELTS essay The bar illustrates the proportion of profits made from seven different movie genres (adventure, comedy, action, drama, thriller, musicals, and animation) in the US in three years (1995, 2000, and 2005).

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