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From an overall perspective, the town was modernized. Furthermore, there have been a significant changes in housing and facilities.

From an overall perspective, the town was modernized. Furthermore, there have been a significant changes in housing and facilities. JwLXe
From an overall perspective, the town was modernized. Furthermore, there have been a significant changes in housing and facilities. In the North, there was a farmland which now is demolished and changed with houses. Moreover, the Primary school in the East, next to it were extended. In the West, the shops were replaced by houses and road, whereas there were no alterations in the post office, bridge and the houses near the bridge. On the other hand, the farmland in the South was modernized with houses all over this area. In addition, the area in the East of the town was developed. The garden was replaced by houses, while the large house was knock-downed and changed with retirement home.
From an
overall
perspective, the town
was modernized
.
Furthermore
, there have been a significant
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "change"?
changes
in housing and facilities.

In the North, there was a farmland which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
is demolished
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
.
Moreover
, the Primary school in the East,
next
to it
were extended
. In the West, the shops
were replaced
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
and road, whereas there were no alterations in the post office, bridge and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
near the bridge.

On the other hand
, the farmland in the South
was modernized
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
all over this area.
In addition
, the area in the East of the town
was developed
. The garden
was replaced
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
, while the large
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
was knock-downed and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
with retirement home.

IELTS essay From an overall perspective, the town was modernized. Furthermore, there have been a significant changes in housing and facilities.

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3 paragraphs
119 words
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