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the bar graphs show the number of people who were affected by noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2017 v.1

the bar graphs show the number of people who were affected by noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2017 v. 1
Some significant part of education like as reading, writing, maths entailed for the centuries. In addition to this, computers which have developed in recent decades should be accepted as fourth skill in these parts. This essay will suggest power of computers as a learning hub, and I agree education parts should be contained technological skills. Education can be evaluated with the success on some lessons such as reading, writing, maths or foreign languages for a long time. In the next decades, computer technology has managed in many things, and it is more important to using well. In schools, computer laboratories and classes are common in the last years and many students know that computer knowledge can be a key for a job for them. Computer skills's beneficial not only finding a job, but also amazing learning hub in every topic. For example, in a national college, students who are successful in computers, are better other lessons according a research. This is because, computer users more curious, at time same time they usually research everything. On the other hand, computers cannot be thought apart from education parts. Most educate materials are related to them. For this reason, if a student is talented in it, she or he uses these technological materials more useful for learning the course. Meanwhile, capable of computers should not thinking less important other parts of learning in schools. In conclusion, computers are used every area in this century in order to ease life. This technological learning hub is fundamental to educate youth generations. Therefore, I completely agree that it has not thought separate from mostly acceptable education classes.
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every area in this century in order to
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life. This technological
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hub is fundamental to educate youth generations.
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IELTS essay the bar graphs show the number of people who were affected by noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2017 v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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