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The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men and women per week in Australia in 2007.

The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men and women per week in Australia in 2007. WGMNK
The bar chart illustrates the amount of time worked by male and female in Australia in 2007. As an overall, it is cler that both genders prefer to work between 30 and 50 hour the most. While only 5 percent of women work about 0 to 10 hour per week, that amount of men tripple, about 15 percent. Under 20 hour on duty for a week is preferer by female than male. The number of female staff who do their job bout 10 to 20 hours per week is more than men 10 percent. The percentage of people who work more than 80 hours a week in Australia in 2002 accounted for 10 each gender. Femal employers work between 30 to 50 hour per week stood at the top by 45 percent, surpass other working hours. Sharing the same peak, the amount of female workers is about 35 percent Compared to that, the higher the working hours are, the less employers work. Less than 15 percent of men choose to work more than 60 hours a week.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of time worked by male and
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in Australia in 2007. As an
overall
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that both genders prefer to
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work
between 30 and 50
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hour
the most.

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5
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of women
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work
about 0 to 10
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hour
per
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week
, that amount of
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men
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tripple
, about 15
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. Under 20
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hour
on duty for a
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week
is
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preferer
by
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female
than male. The number of
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female
staff who do their job bout 10 to 20
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hours
per
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week
is more than
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10
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. The percentage of
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who
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more than 80
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a
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in Australia in 2002 accounted for 10 each gender.

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employers
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between 30 to 50
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per
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stood at the top by 45
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, surpass other working
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hours
. Sharing the same peak, the amount of
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female
workers is about 35
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percent


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are, the
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less
employers
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. Less than 15
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of
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men
choose to
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more than 60
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IELTS essay The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men and women per week in Australia in 2007.

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