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the affect of people on animals and solution

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Nowadays, the influences of human beings are culprits of the end of many animals species. There are a number of reasons for this problem and resolutions to solve it. The extinction of animals comes from two serious causes which make by people. Firstly, in order to develop the economy, humans pollute the environment by illegal activities, which make adverse effects on wildlife of the animals. For example, every year the factories directly discharge the number of emissions into the sea, as the result in the deaths of many kinds of marine animals. Secondly, people destroy plenty of forests every year to have lands served for agricultural purposes. This makes lack of native houses for animals and from that, the animals species will die. To decrease the number of extinct animals, there are two significant ways to solve this problem. Firstly, government officials should enforce strict policies to prohibit the activities of humans influencing wildlife animals. For example, in Vietnam, people who destroy homes of animals like forests face up to punishment by imprisonment from five to ten years. Secondly, students should be educated to enrich knowledge to preserve animals by schools when they was little children. Specifically, the schools try their best to point out the reasons and resolutions to save animals.
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species. There are a number of reasons for this problem and resolutions to solve it.

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animals
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from two serious causes which
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, in order to develop the economy, humans pollute the environment by illegal activities, which
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make
adverse effects on wildlife of the
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animals
.
For example
, every year the factories
directly
discharge the number of emissions into the sea, as the result in the deaths of
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many
kinds of marine
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animals
.
Secondly
,
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people
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destroy
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plenty
of forests every year to have lands served for agricultural purposes. This
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makes
lack of native
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for
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animals
and from that, the
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animals
species will
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die
.

To decrease the number of extinct
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animals
, there are two significant ways to solve this problem.
Firstly
,
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government
officials should enforce strict policies to prohibit the activities of humans influencing wildlife
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animals
.
For example
, in Vietnam,
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people
who
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destroy
homes of
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animals
like forests face up to punishment by imprisonment from five to ten years.
Secondly
, students should
be educated
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animals
by schools when they
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.
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IELTS essay the affect of people on animals and solution

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
212 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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