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Do you agree or disagree with the statement that school should finance social activities rather than students' diets.

that school should finance social activities rather than students' diets. jRDxX

It is general truth that students' education does not only consist of learning academic subjects, it is also important for students to develop social skills. However, in spite of this indisputable fact, I still insist on my own opinion that students' healthy diets lies before the social activities and I would explore only two primary ones here. First of all, school has responsibility and duty to guarantee students' diet, especially when our food has been overpolluted and overindustrialized. As you see, the sheer volume of cheap food we produce nowadays has already threatened to overwhelm us. . .

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only
 consist of learning academic subjects, it is also
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important
 for students to develop social This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
. However
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:notwithstanding
in spite of
 this indisputable fact, I still
 insist on my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 opinion that students' healthy diets lies This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 the social activities and I would explore This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 two primary ones here.

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First of all
, school has responsibility and duty to guarantee students' diet, especially
 when our food has been Possible spelling mistake found.over polluted
overpolluted
 and Possible spelling mistake found.over industrialized
overindustrialized
. As you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
, the sheer volume of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :economical
cheap
 food we produce nowadays has already threatened to overwhelm us. Don't put a space before the full stop.
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Don't put a space before the full stop.
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