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Do you agree or disagree that animals should be kept in men made cells.

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I disagree that animals should be kept in men made cells. I feel that zoos are an unsuitable environment for animals and therefore should be abolished. Firstly, zoo animals are kept in very confined area compared with their vast natural habitat. Due to this zoo animals develop unnatural habits like pacing back and forth or swaying from side to side. For example, polar bears are given about 10 metres of walking space where as in their arctic home they roam for hundreds of kilometers. Similarly, lions and tigers are confined in cages where they lack exercise and stimulation. What is more, it is very common for visitors to tease and provoke caged animals. This also leads to unnatural behavior in animals. Secondly, the breeding programmes taken up by zoos are not very successful. For instance, the ‗Panda Breeding Programme‘ has been very costly and unsuccessful. Also, zoo life does not prepare animals for the challenges of life in the wild. They are provided good food in the zoos, but if left in the jungle, they may die of starvation because they cannot hunt for themselves. Finally, the zoo is an unnatural environment that exposes animals to many dangers. Diseases often spread between species that would never live together naturally. For example, many Asian elephants have died in African zoos after catching herpes from African elephants. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, zoos are unnatural habitats for the wild animals and there is no justification in caging these marvelous creatures of God.
I disagree that
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should be
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kept
in
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men
made cells. I feel that zoos are
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an


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unsuitable
environment for
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animals
and
therefore
should
be abolished
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Firstly
, zoo
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animals
are
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kept
in
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very
confined area compared with their vast natural

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habitat
. Due to this zoo
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animals
develop
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unnatural
habits like pacing back and
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forth


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or
swaying from side to side.
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, polar bears are
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given
about 10
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metres
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of


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walking
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where as
in their arctic home they roam for hundreds of kilometers.

Similarly
, lions and tigers
are confined
in cages where they lack exercise and

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stimulation
.
What is more
, it is
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very
common for visitors to tease and provoke
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caged


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animals
. This
also
leads to
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unnatural
behavior in animals.

Secondly
, the breeding
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programmes
taken up by zoos are not
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very
successful. For

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instance
, the
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‗Panda
Breeding
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Programme
‘ has been
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very
costly and unsuccessful.

Also
, zoo life does not prepare
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animals
for the challenges of life in the wild. They
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are


provided
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good
food in the zoos,
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but
if
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left
in the jungle, they may
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die
of starvation

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because
they cannot hunt for themselves.

Finally
, the zoo is an
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unnatural
environment that exposes
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animals
to
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many
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dangers
.

Diseases
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often
spread between species that would never
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live
together
naturally
. For

example,
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many
Asian elephants have
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died
in African zoos after catching herpes from

African elephants.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, zoos are
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unnatural
habitats for the wild

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animals
and there is no justification in caging these marvelous creatures of God.

IELTS essay that animals should be kept in men made cells.

Essay
  American English
20 paragraphs
256 words
5.0
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