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Thai Dance Journey from zero to hero

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In May, I had just started high school in my province. I was initially ecstatic about my new surroundings and new friends. Before the school director came up to congratulate new students on the orientation day, there were many talent shows from different school clubs to encourage new students to join their interested clubs. Many of the shows were excellent in general, but the Thai Dance Club's performance stood out the most. The show not only surprised me because of the actors' bodies, which appeared to be boneless and bendable in every way, but it also inspired me to try Thai dance for the first time in my life.

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