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TELL ME ABOUT ONE OF YOUR INCIDENT OR ACCIDENT

TELL ME ABOUT ONE OF YOUR INCIDENT OR ACCIDENT mW3JK
What I am going to talk below is a true story. It was an accident of my grandfather that until now I’ve still been scared. It was about 3-4 years ago, when he climbed the ladder to do something. He fell and had to stay in the hospital for 3 months with a serious back injury. At that time, I was in school and didn’t find out until evening when I came home. After that, it was a very hard time. He couldn’t move or doing anything by himself. And then, we had to do the physics therapy to restore his health. But even now, he still can’t do everything as before. It was such a difficult time!
What I am going to talk below is a true story. It was an accident of my grandfather that until
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. It was about 3-4 years ago, when he climbed the ladder to do something. He fell and had to stay in the hospital for 3 months with a serious back injury. At that time, I was in school and didn’t find out until evening when I came home. After that, it was a
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time. He couldn’t
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or doing anything by himself. And then, we had to do the physics therapy to restore his health.
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. It was such a difficult time!
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IELTS essay TELL ME ABOUT ONE OF YOUR INCIDENT OR ACCIDENT

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
118 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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