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I think, we get introduced to volunteer work very early. For example, from elementary school to high school, we have launched and responded to movements such as donating books, clothes, etc. to the fund to recycle them for other purposes. But, The real volunteering that I participated in started in my high school years. It was the most unforgettable experience of my student life. Because the main task of students is learning. So at first, we only do small activities at school. Until summer break, all of our time is devoted to volunteering. The first will be to support two important exams: the 10th entrance exam and the graduation exam. After that time, our group will be assigned to volunteer in a commune. We will be at the activity from 5am, end at 5pm, and around noon, we buy our own food and cook together. We always work with a smile on our face. Although it is very tiring, the things that are received in return are worth it. It's a great way to help other people. It's also very satisfying to know that you are not wasting your time and are helping people who need help. Life is much more interesting when you're volunteer. Volunteer builds a strong relationship among humans. It is easy to make friends with the same hobbies and purpose. Moreover, volunteering also trains necessary skills. Such skills include communication skills, ability to work with others, ability to take direction and lead others, time management and dedication. Giving in volunteering is the first element to bring to the community, but the value brought is the lessons from community life, from stories, from the people, from the land we live in. come and it will be an invaluable lesson that by giving we get more back. . . My 3 years of high school have not missed a volunteer season.
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introduced to
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work
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, from elementary
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school
to high
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school
, we have launched and responded to movements such as donating books, clothes, etc. to the fund to recycle them for
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other
purposes.
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But
, The real
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volunteering
that I participated in
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started
in my high
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school
years. It was the most unforgettable experience of my student life.
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the main task of students is learning.
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at
first
, we
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do
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small
activities at
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school
. Until summer break, all of our
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time
is devoted
to
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volunteering
. The
first
will be to support two
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important
exams: the 10th entrance exam and the graduation exam. After that
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time
, our group will
be assigned
to
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volunteer
in a commune. We will be at the activity from 5am,
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end
at 5pm, and around noon, we
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buy
our
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food and cook together. We always work with a smile on our face. Although it is
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very
tiring, the things that
are received
in return are worth it. It's a great way to
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help
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other
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people
. It's
also
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very
satisfying to know that you are not wasting your
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time
and are helping
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people
who need
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help
. Life is much more interesting when you're
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volunteer
.
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Volunteer
builds a strong relationship among humans. It is easy to
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make
friends with the same hobbies and purpose.
Moreover
,
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volunteering
also
trains necessary
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skills
. Such
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skills
include communication
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skills
, ability to work with others, ability to take direction and lead others,
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time
management and dedication. Giving in
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volunteering
is the
first
element to bring to the community,
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but
the value brought is the lessons from community life, from stories, from the
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people
, from the land we
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live
in.
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come
and it will be an invaluable lesson that by giving we
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get
more back.
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My 3 years of high
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school
have not missed a
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volunteer
season.
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IELTS essay tell me about activity you usually do

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
313 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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