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Please describe which of your activities (extracurricular activities,academic achivements or work experience) has been most meaningful and why.

Please describe which of your activities (extracurricular activities, academic achivements or work experience) has been most meaningful and why. J3G25
To be a head cheerleader in 5th years of high school, It is to ensure all abilities of confidence, leadership, and creativity skills. The head cheerleader also practices in maintaining efficiency and therefore promoting positive interpersonal skills with other people. Because I have to change schools in the fourth year of high school, it makes me miss out on doing academic activities at the first school. For institutions, they want students to be effective in extracurricular activities which can develop student’s abilities. When I started to be a head cheerleader, I was fascinated because several students wanted to do these activities as well. Dancing is one of the best parts that I relish to do since I was young and I have been in a girl group dancing in secondary school. That is why other teachers and friends give this role to me. The time spent with friends and juniors at school is a growing period for high school students. When school was closed, we had to practice more and more with the Christmas theme for sports events which made everyone felt fatigued because we all practiced for long hours in a day from 9 am in the morning to 4 pm in the afternoon. During that time, they gave me a huge hug and a hospitable smile, and told me that I did a great job every time we spent together and I work hard for them and be a strong leader. This speech made me thankful because at that time I studied hard and did these things at the same time which is hard for me because it was my first time planning all the songs, choreography, and making everyone trust me to do it well. Although the pandemic of Covid-19 was coming, every activity at school had to be canceled. Everyone was so sad, especially me but I think that we all did great all along. This was a good experience that I was interested in and thankful for everyone in my cheerleader team.
To be a head cheerleader in 5th years of high
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school
, It is to ensure all abilities of confidence, leadership, and creativity
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skills
. The head cheerleader
also
practices in maintaining efficiency and
therefore
promoting
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positive
interpersonal
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skills
with other
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people
.
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Because
I
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have to
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change
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schools
in the fourth year of high
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school
, it
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makes
me miss out on doing academic
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activities
at the
first
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school
. For institutions, they want
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students
to be effective in extracurricular
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activities
which can develop
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student’s
abilities. When I
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started
to be a head cheerleader, I
was fascinated
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because
several
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students
wanted to do these
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activities
as well
. Dancing is one of the best parts that I relish to do since I was young and I have been in a girl group dancing in secondary
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school
.
That is
why other teachers and friends give this role to me. The
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time
spent with friends and juniors at
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school
is a growing period for high
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school
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students
. When
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school
was closed
, we had to practice more and more with the Christmas theme for sports
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
which made
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everyone
felt fatigued
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because
we all practiced for long hours in a day from 9
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am in the morning
to 4
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pm in the afternoon
. During that
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time
, they gave me a huge hug and a hospitable smile, and
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told
me that I did a great job every
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time
we spent together and I work
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hard
for them and be a strong leader. This speech made me thankful
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because
at that
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time
I studied
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hard
and did these things at the same
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time
which is
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hard
for me
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because
it was my
first
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time
planning all the songs, choreography, and making
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everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "trusts", "trusted".
trust
me to do it well. Although the pandemic of Covid-19 was coming, every
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activity
at
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school
had to
be canceled
.
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Everyone
was
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so
sad,
especially
me
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but
I
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think
that we all did great all along. This was a
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good
experience that I
was interested
in and thankful for
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everyone
in my cheerleader team.
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IELTS essay Please describe which of your activities (extracurricular activities, academic achivements or work experience) has been most meaningful and why.

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