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tell about how did your parents meet and the difficult time your mom met before

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In 1990, the first time my father met my mother and he fell in love. He asked and knew more her information. Those day, she taught in Quang Yen Primary school and the distance from her school to her home very far so when she want to visit her house she made a phone call and he picked up her immediately! After three times she loved him and they fell in love. Three months later, they decided get married. However, my mom had a problem with my uncle. She didn't like my mom and she told wrong stories to everyone in my family. A long time, some people in my family didn't believe my mom and only my father beside and protected my mom. Then my mom gave birth to me. She spent most time for me and protect and care to my father and me. She didn't care to what did anyone tell about her. Long time later, when people in my family contact and communicate to my mom they more understood and love my mom more.
In 1990, the
first
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my father met my
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mother and
he fell in
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love
. He asked and knew more her information.
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Those day
, she taught in
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Quang
Yen Primary school and the distance from her school to her home
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very
far
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when she
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want
to visit her
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house
she made a phone
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call and
he picked up her immediately! After three
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times
she
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loved
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him and
they fell in
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love
. Three months later, they decided
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get
married.
However
, my
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mom
had a problem with my uncle. She didn't like my
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mom and
she
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told
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wrong
stories to everyone in my family. A long
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time
,
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some
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people
in my family didn't believe my
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mom
and
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only
my father beside and protected my
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mom
. Then my
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mom
gave birth to me. She spent most
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time
for me and protect and care to my father and me. She didn't care to what did anyone
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tell
about her. Long
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time
later, when
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people
in my family contact and communicate to my
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mom
they more understood and
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love
my
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mom
more.
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IELTS essay tell about how did your parents meet and the difficult time your mom met before

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
178 words
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