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Television programs and movies have become saturated with violent content. What are some resulting social problems and how can we deal with them? v.1

Television programs and movies have become saturated with violent content. What are some resulting social problems and how can we deal with them? v. 1
Today’s people are surrounded with a bulk of television programs, movies, or TV series with various contents. Violence is one of the ubiquitous themes in the film industry and along with huge interest of the audience, it paves the way for some serious problems. This issue will be discussed in this essay along with some possible solutions that can be implemented in order to alleviate the problem. One of the problems of utmost importance is that people who watch films or TV programs that contains violent scenes can be inclined to do similar violation of the law, such as robbery or murder attempts, because beholders of the films think that it is something as easy as in films. One thing they do not understand is that real life is far more different than those in movies. Take a worldwide famous Spanish made TV series called “La Casa De Papel”, or in English, “Money Heist” as an example. In this tv show, a group of people gather and crate a gang and with Salvador Dali masks on their faces, rob Bank of Spain with a genius, quite long-prepared plan of the character called El Professor. It is not surprising that after these tv series, different people from different part of the world tried to do robbery with the same red jumpsuits and Dali masks. The only solution here, it seems, is to make public awareness about the differences between films and real life. People should understand that not all real life scenarios finish with a happy ending and taking an example by movies is not such a good idea. It is obvious that films with violent contents cannot be banned, because myriad of people who watch them correlate with the characters and want to watch them. Furthermore, prevention of films with violence will damage the film industry completely. Therefore, public understanding is the most convenient solution, in my opinion. To sum up, the main issue that violent content in movies brings about is a tendency to commit crime, but it can be addressed when people realize the difference between life and the movies.
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people
are surrounded
with a bulk of television programs,
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movies
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some
serious problems. This issue will
be discussed
in this essay along with
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some
possible solutions that can
be implemented
in order to alleviate the problem.

One of the problems of utmost importance is that
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people
who
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watch
films or TV programs that contains violent scenes can
be inclined
to do similar violation of the law, such as robbery or murder attempts,
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because
beholders of the films
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think
that it is something as easy as in films. One thing they do not understand is that real
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life
is far more
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than
those in
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movies
. Take a worldwide
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famous
Spanish made TV series called “La
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part of the world tried to do robbery with the same red jumpsuits and Dali masks.

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only
solution here, it seems, is to
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make
public awareness about the differences between films and real
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.
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People
should understand that not all real
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life
scenarios finish with a happy ending and taking an example by
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movies
is not such a
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good
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idea
. It is obvious that films with violent contents cannot
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,
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because
myriad of
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people
who
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them correlate with the characters and want to
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them.
Furthermore
, prevention of films with violence will damage the film industry completely.
Therefore
, public understanding is the most convenient solution, in my opinion.

To sum up, the main issue that violent content in
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movies
brings about is a tendency to commit crime,
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but
it can
be addressed
when
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people
realize the difference between
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life
and the
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movies
.
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IELTS essay Television programs and movies have become saturated with violent content. What are some resulting social problems and how can we deal with them? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
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