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Television has had a significant influences on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively and negatively affected the cultural development of your society? v.1

Television has had a significant influences on the culture of many societies. v. 1
It is true that television is entertainment resources through it give us lot of relaxation for mind. The root can that television plays a vital role in human being life. some adolescent ponder that television has impact decreasing the ritual of your citizens. There are manifold reasons for this. This essay would throw some light an all aspects to see things in the perspective. The seeds to the issue are multiheads. There most predominant it is no doubt today every dozen using the mass media. For instance, cell phones, computer, laptop, tablets, iPhone, DVD, CD, and television so on. Therefore, they always use it in their life instead of television is very common thing in India but also off spring should television in everyone house /apartment. Moreover, kids always liking all the shows as far as they has plethora time killing in their life. Nevertheless, there are no denying, in my point of view television is very essential part of life but also people can limit use the television in our life. Furthermore, they must superb effect in their career line as well as they always active in their work and they would essay learn all the things. For example, study, professional, function, sports, industry line and business extra. lastly, time is very imperative in whole life than time never come back in our life. All said and done, I reckon on one hand there are strong opinion television has umpteen indispensable in whole life. All in all some person trust that television down fall all the cultural development. on other hand I am agree with this because youth has always liking introvert himself if they could not interact somebody. Thus, pupil would control any thing in their life so we should table time they could follow it. they can achieve anything in our life.
It is true that
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television
is entertainment resources through it give us lot of relaxation for mind. The root can that
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television
plays a vital role in human being
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life
.
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some
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adolescent
ponder that
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television
has impact decreasing the ritual of your citizens. There are manifold reasons for this. This essay would throw
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some
light an all
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aspects
to
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see
things in the perspective.

The seeds to the issue are
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multiheads
. There most predominant it is no doubt
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today
every dozen using the mass media.
For instance
, cell phones, computer, laptop, tablets, iPhone, DVD, CD, and
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television
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.
Therefore
, they always
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use
it in their
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life
instead
of
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television
is
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very
common thing in India
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but
also
off spring should
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television
in everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "houses", "housed".
house
/apartment.
Moreover
, kids always liking all the
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shows
as far as they
The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "have", "haven"
has
plethora
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time
killing in their life.

Nevertheless
, there are no denying, in my point of view
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television
is
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very
essential part of
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life
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but
also
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people
can limit
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use
the
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television
in our
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life
.
Furthermore
, they
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must superb
effect in their career line
as well
as they always active in their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
work and
they would essay learn all the things.
For example
, study, professional, function, sports, industry line and business extra.
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lastly
,
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time
is
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very
imperative in whole
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life
than
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time
never
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come
back in our life.

All said and done, I reckon on one hand there are strong opinion
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television
has umpteen indispensable in whole
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life
. All in all
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some
person trust that
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television
down fall all the cultural development.
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on
other hand I am
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agree
with this
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because
youth has always liking introvert himself if they could not interact somebody.
Thus
,

pupil would control
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any thing
in their
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life
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so
we should table
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time
they could follow it. they can achieve anything in our
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life
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay Television has had a significant influences on the culture of many societies. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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